Telepathic Love Poem

 

 

These words are like tiny stars

that hang on black strings

tied to the tips of pine tree branches

that hover and dip in the breeze,

creating momentary sparkles.

 

It's tragic when words are spoken

but no one is willing to listen.

My last poem was a disaster

but you are the master of words.

Dear poet.

Oh how I listen to your verses

and I wonder why God curses 

the people who live on planet earth.

The truth is, I have this feeling

that I cannot describe

but you can read my mind

and say what I am thinking.

 

 

 

Reviews

[FIN]

This poem is beautiful. And deeply pangs the heart, beacause you (or the protagonist) feels their voice/heart is going unheard.

The imagery of the first stanza is remarkable, sets the tone very well.

I like this poem as well. Deeply.

Even more so after the second read. Noticing there is a partner of which speaks your words already so eloquently for you. Love and despair wrapped in one.

This is very well-written.

[Cerebriation]

I love this. It is well worded and very powerful. What I hear in my head resembles some sort of dialogue, either to one's self, or God, or nothing at all. I get an image of melancholy longing and doubt, but possibly not about love, as the title would make you think. The flow is great even without rhyme, and the grammar/punctuation is great as well. Awesome piece!

[andrew mitchell]

Tragic indeed when words go over the head for no one is listening. A good write Michael

[Gypsy Warrior Queen]

Yes yes yes words need no definition when there is love to be spread...we hear them whispering softly on our hearts...it amazing to just know! Ty for sparking my light. I think I've been stuck in a jar with no air.

[Joan Davis]

I really like this. It's always amazing when someone else speaks your felling more clearly than you even can yourself. I think poetry does that for a lot of people. It helps you make sense of your own thoughts and feeling.💮

[NotAboutMe]

This is a great poem. We are all filled with unlimited potential. But for most of us something keeps that potential trapped inside. We see it expressed by others and long to find similar release.

I wish I could sing like that =)

[Michael X]

Hey thanks for the comment! That means a lot to me. Wow, that is a great description of the meaning!

[mattavelli]

Hello, Michael! :)
I don't get it. I feel like I'm missing some obvious meaning, but reread a few times and can't find it.

[Michael X]

Hey thanks for stopping by, thant means a lot to me. As for the meaning.. hm, I the poet am speaking to another poet wghis is also my muse, who is telepathic. I know that really doesn't make much sense LOL
After I read it, I think that is what it means.

[Tony Jordan]

Her words go neglected despite their awesome effect on the author. In the land of the blind the one eyed reviewer is King ; p
Another good one Michael X

[Michael X]

lol, thanks man! I like that!

[Jon Roggie]

Nice. The stars are meant to be shared, and so are the words.

[Michael X]

Hey Jon, thanks for stopping by and commenting on this poem!

[Jon Roggie]

My pleasure.

[Wondering Mind]

Your Muse understands and appreciates, I'm sure. I feel it in your words.

[Michael X]

Thanks my friend, I always appreciate your wise thoughts!