A Love Proverb

The story of an old man and his unforgiving past.

And as he stood, a stage appeal;

He only writes, for what is real.

A quill and ink set by his side,

The masterpiece swelled up in pride.

 

A teardrop falls on to the page,

Mixing with ink he writes a phrase;

“Oh to my young and dear and sweet,

I love you so, just hear me, please.”

 

The last words fell into the rhyme,

He took a bow and fell to time.

And as he fell he threw his work,

Into the dark without a smirk.

 

He sits alone, so old and cold,

His love for her, she’ll never know.

And to this day, to his dismay,

No words, no ink; a life so gray.

Author's Note

So, I wrote this out of inspiration of a picture I saw of an old man sitting alone on a bench outside. It said "I've been in love with the same woman for almost 50 years now. I wish she knew." Plus, I wanted to see how well I could write a rhythmic poem with a nice and easy beat to it. tell me how you like it, critisize and so on. Thanks for reading!

Reviews

[Wuji]

This poem has serious merits and a first class title. It feels crafted and polished and the only thing it lacked was a tiny bit of the next level of authenticity-originality. However, it is of a very high order and shows a great deal of poetic potential.

[Michael Thrower]

Why thank you very much! It is one of my best poems.

[Ella]

Awh! This is so cute, I love it. Well written, beautiful and I truthfully can't find a single thing wrong with it! You're an amazing writer :) I can't wait to read more of your work :)

[Michael Thrower]

Well thank you! :D

[Ella]

You're welcome :)

[Brandon S. Whitten]

Bravo, Michael! This is a splendid read and write.

[Michael Thrower]

Thank you Sir!

[K.]

wow.
this has great flow, and has beautiful meaning.
fantastic work, well done.

[Michael Thrower]

Thank you very much :)

[MissEpic2902]

this is beautiful!! i couldn't look away for even a second!!!!

[Michael Thrower]

Haha, thanks!

[MissEpic2902]

No Prob! :)

[K-mo]

This is so beautiful! You are a great writer:)

[Michael Thrower]

Thank you :D

[K-mo]

Your welcome!

[Isa Ruffatti]

Great poem! If it was a rhythm you were looking for, why you got so much more. idea+inspiration+rhythm+choice of words= INCREDIBLE
I will add it to my library if you don't mind :)
PS: At first it reminded me of Martin Luther who called for reform in the Church but caused something greater because he underestimated the power his words held.

[sincitycitizen]

I really like this!

[♪The Girl Next Do..]

Excellent poem. It was very smooth and flowed easily. A simple write, yet so deep. Very intriguing. Makes me think. Fantastic write!

[FrancescaX]

I hate the feeling of regret. Teardrops...It reminds me of a book I read recently. Tears of the Moon by Nora Roberts.The rhyming was on point and the flow was fantastic.