Anything you think I should change about this? Critics are welcome. Does it flow well? How is the rhyme? If you could compare this poem to a landscape, what type would it be? Thank you for reading. -Michael
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I think it flows smoothly, I don't really see anything that I would change. What I picture when reading this, is someone sailing the ocean with the night sky being perfectly mirrored in the water ^^ such a pretty picture. Oh, I did notice that the last stanza is longer than the others, was that on purpose or did you want to stick with the same number in all of them? It's not a big deal, just something I noticed lol
Good Job
Posted 10 Years Ago
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10 Years Ago
Yes, the last stanza was purposefully longer :D And that is really nice to hear! Thank you for readi.. read moreYes, the last stanza was purposefully longer :D And that is really nice to hear! Thank you for reading and reviewing this.
fantastic. others might say to change it here and thee but i say keep it like it is because it is a masterpiece, its rhyme was good, it painted an amazing picture i loved it a lot :) it was perfect
Posted 10 Years Ago
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10 Years Ago
Thank you! Reading that really made me feel good :)
Flows well...though I sure wouldn't mind seeing the galaxy lol Saying that, to travel would be epic...to see a different sunset on new shores ... enjoyed :)
The entire time I read this I heard it in Rafiki's voice from The Lion King.
But it's really good(: I enjoyed the imagination and the visual I got from it. Very breath taking and beautiful! Nicely written.
-Mak(:
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10 Years Ago
Thank you so much, and that is hilarious! I'm glad you enjoyed; now I'll be reading it in Rafiki's v.. read moreThank you so much, and that is hilarious! I'm glad you enjoyed; now I'll be reading it in Rafiki's voice.
"I dream a dream of traveling far
To ride seas under the northern star
To find what others failed to see"
Keep up the dream and poetry. Bravo...................
Posted 10 Years Ago
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10 Years Ago
Thank you! It's odd because I don't really enjoy poetry, but I can say with enough assurance that I .. read moreThank you! It's odd because I don't really enjoy poetry, but I can say with enough assurance that I can write it rather well. Thank you again.
10 Years Ago
Steve Job was odd. But look what happened. You are welcome...:)......................
It makes total sense and creates an experience that is beautifully described. The flow was nice and I liked it that not all of it rhymed because sometimes only focusing on rhryming can take away from the truth of the poem. . . good job. . .peace, balance and harmony
I think it flows smoothly, I don't really see anything that I would change. What I picture when reading this, is someone sailing the ocean with the night sky being perfectly mirrored in the water ^^ such a pretty picture. Oh, I did notice that the last stanza is longer than the others, was that on purpose or did you want to stick with the same number in all of them? It's not a big deal, just something I noticed lol
Good Job
Posted 10 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
10 Years Ago
Yes, the last stanza was purposefully longer :D And that is really nice to hear! Thank you for readi.. read moreYes, the last stanza was purposefully longer :D And that is really nice to hear! Thank you for reading and reviewing this.
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