This poem is just what I needed to hear. I just lost a jury rape trial and my offender walked free. This poem summarizes much of how I feel and the words have such flow and feel so natural. Your thoughts are poured out in this piece and I thoroughly enjoyed it.
I love this, it's awesome, I'd like it more if the first line didn't make me sing "Consider Yourself" from Oliver Twist, but whatever xD can't complain.
I love the title of this piece so much I am sitting here seething that I didn't come up with it *laugh* I think poetry is so deeply personal to the poet I have a hard time reviewing it properly, but if I was to say one thing about this it would be I rather wish it had more to do with the title (that f*****g brilliant title!!) than the abstract ideas you have flowing throughout the body of the work. If the message to fight racism or whatever ism you choose was a little more concrete, I think I would have found myself loving the piece as much as I love the title. Not to say the poem isn't good...it is...and I thank you for sharing it with us. Keep up the hard work.
-kimmer
Posted 12 Years Ago
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12 Years Ago
Well thank you :D Trying a good title for it was a bit hard for me, so honestly I just chose a rando.. read moreWell thank you :D Trying a good title for it was a bit hard for me, so honestly I just chose a random line from the poem that I thought would sound cool xD And it's not necessarily racism. It's political, national, religious. Kind of a shady poem I guess. The sound is a back up to it.
Oh I never click on those things *laugh* I'll take your word about the song ;-) It wouldn't be quite.. read moreOh I never click on those things *laugh* I'll take your word about the song ;-) It wouldn't be quite so shady if the political, religious, and national elements weren't so ambiguous...and it's my pleasure, I enjoy your work.
12 Years Ago
I know, that's the fun of poems ;) And thank you, glad you enjoy.
yes, agreed! "rid the world of scum through music and rhyme" the world should be run by creative people, you know? It really should. This poem was fun to read.
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