Being There

Is this good?

"Just keep fighting! Everything will

Be fine I promise. You will be fine

This is a tough battle I know but

I know you have the war won in

The long run. Everything is okay 

And soon you will be out of the

Hospital soon. I'm crying because

You are so strong and brave.

I have to go but you know I love

You to the fullest and I will be 

Back tomorrow at the same time."

...

I leave the hospital knowing the

Truth that he won't make it. It 

Hurts me to the core to lie to him 

But I can't imagine his face telling

Him he won't last another week.

Am I being selfish? Am I being 

Thoughtful? I don't know because

The lines are blurred. I don't even 

Have to work, I just had to get out

Of there. I can't look at my son 

That way for a long period of time.

I think for a quick minute to make

A decision. I will not be without my

Son no longer! I am going back 

Inside and staying with him until

The very end. If he can stare death

Square in the face them at least I 

Can do is hold his hand through it

All. Together we can face the world

Author's Note

Story poem?

Reviews

[SmittyJas]

Very strong story telling of the cycle of life we all face. But loss of a child is so great it hurts to the core Its heart wrenching sore.

[Treble]

Beautiful. Just beautiful. It left me crying. You really put the reader in the moment. I think even better would be some more figurative language. :)

[C. Rose]

The perspective feels realistic. Well done.
Watch out for repetition in the first stanza (soon) (I know). Some repetition is okay, especially to make the perspective feel real, but the two soon-s in one sentence stood out to me.
Typo: "them at least"
Missing period at the end?

Keep writing :)

[A. Amos]

Well written poetic story, just being there for someone and giving hope...its the finest act of kindness and humanity. Enjoyed reading your work!

[Jennie Baron]

It truly is a story. I like the way that in the end the parent (mother? father?--do you think that makes a difference?) finds the courage to face death along with the son.

Just a grammar note: It should be "I will not be without my son any longer."