Connect

Another reject poem by Jack

Every time we try

It all ends the same

Intense hatred and arguments

I can't believe again I fell for this

Your ways are so sadistic

This time with you I'm really finished

No more calling on me

Too bad because I needed someone to connect with...

It's been two years and I missed you dearly

You called me saying we can fix it

I'm on my way over right now

I'm so glad you called

I've been thinking about how our kids would look like

I've been thinking about the feeling of you tonight

I'm at the door,

I come right in,

We make love until four

I must say I'm craving for more

You say what I hated and ruined the moment

Asking me about other women and mentioning that man you were with

I swear why you have to do this every time

I'm heading out the door for good this time

Too bad because I needed someone to connect with...

Author's Note

For whatever reason He didn't like this one and was going to delete it! So I decoded to post it here and to gather your thoughts on it! Do you think it should of been deleted?

Reviews

[michele vera]

I Truly Enjoyed This Poem! Well, I have quite a few things to say about it! I'm Just Stating My Honest Opinion. So Here Goes, it sounds to me as if these two written about are Truly In Love, that's my Personal Take on this. If Two Years went by and they still have need and Love for One Another. They Obviously Both did't Forget One Another! I wanted to see the ending differently. I would've Preferred to see that He Stood, and not Left. I Feel "Time is of the Essence," so if two People don't Forget Each Other over Time, Then They Are Meant To Be! Thats Just My Take On This. This Poem wasExcellent. It Was Passionate, Romantic and had Deepened Emotion. Excellent Work!

[Michael Phillips]

Thanks I'm glad I saved it!

[michele vera]

I'm Glad As Well. This Was Excellent!

[M Boblett]

This is a very sad statement of relationships, but apparently one deeply felt. I do not think it should have been deleted. It portrays the yo-yo effect some individuals go through in their lives, being unable to break ties despite trying. It seemed honest in feeling.

[lissalovesyou]

I'm so glad you saved it!
This was very emotional, even though I was sad at the end...
lissalovesyou:)
(sorry about the late review)

[Wynter Ignatius]

Emotions and thoughts are always raw, rough and unfiltered, so I would say no. After all, this was felt and should be shared. True, it might evoke some feelings that are less desired but I have deleted but one poem and I regret it immensely despite the pain it brought me.

[Addy]

I like it even though I wish it had ended differently! Haha

[♔ CrownedDevil &#..]

I love this poem. Nicely written.

Kaze~ :-)

[Jennie Baron]

I don't think it should be deleted. Actually it's quite compelling and I agree passionate. To me it speaks about how jealousy/possessiveness can ruin a good thing, and I wonder why people constantly have to hurt each other so sadistically (they wouldn't if they didn't care about each other).

P.S. in the fourth line is "felt" supposed to be "fell"?

[Michael Phillips]

Boy oh boy I thought I already replied to all of these... Sorry for that! Yesy it is suppose to be fell, thank you for pointing it out and thank you for the review!!!!

[Jennie Baron]

You are certainly welcome!

[NoelHC]

This reminds me a bit of the premise in the Lady Antebellum song Need You Now, together, apart, the joy and then the hurting again, a cycle that repeats.
I think the poem is worth saving, it tells a truth.

One thing I noticed in the line "I can't believe again I felt for this" I think the word should be fell.

[Michael Phillips]

Ah thank you about the correction! Love to see a GOOD eye! Thanks also for the review as well.

[Missiannelli]

I absolutely LOVE this poem. I can feel the connection, even though after 2 years of not being together.

[Parimal Pratyush]

I agree with Michele's review.. It is good, and good job on saving it.. :D