Pink Champagne

A sunrise story...unfinished like most things.

Skies painted pink champagne.

While thunder clouds roll.

Zeus's light shines the way.

As these clouds begin to take shape.

Visions come to mind...

Wishful thinking is...

Somthing always misunderstood.

So I stand real close.

To what I  believe in.

 

Reviews

[Touché Armada]

Wishful thinking is...

Somthing always misunderstood.

So I stand real close.

To what I believe in.

Four great lines you have there. Something most have thought I'm sure, but not in words.
Nice to see a couple of pieces here from you.

Just a couple of maybe edits:

While thunder clouds rolls. (drop the s off rolls)

As these cloud begin to take shape. (add an s to cloud)

Just little, but makes a big difference in compact writes.

Take care.

[imawriter]

Skies painted pink champagne.

I love that image! I love sunrises and sunsets and have seen many pink ones, but never thought of it as champagne.. I will now look at the sky much differently.
I think it's pretty cool you added Zeus in the mix too.
Probably just me.. cause I'm weird.. but it would have stood up well on it's own without those last two lines. Still.. I love it

[Jessica Fox]

This had a mystical, fun, flirty feel to the poem. I liked the painted images another great piece

[Summers Under The Old O..]

I really like this poem. I love the last four lines, they are amazing. I also like the first line. It really paints the picture of a sunrise. Nice job, good poem.

Summer

[darkgurl]

Wonderfully put and well written....Kim