As The Blood Flows

The less I know, the more I am.
The less I see, the more I grow.

An empty cup left lonely
in an invisible room;
a room created by the
humility experienced
by its builder.

Once upon a time
the cup held stars of amber;
golden lights that shone
for all the jungle
to be.

Lies have overwhelmed
and so it sits empty;
deserted in the forest of
mockers who have
lost touch with
living.

The less I am, the more I become.
The less I say, the more I absorb.

Perspective is often
a planet of dissection;
where rambling
words are celebrated
in the cities of
surrender.

In a thought, with
nothing but a gesture;
I smash the cup.
Its' shards of glass
slipping carelessly
into the veins
of thinking.

The less I become, the more I am.
The less I share, the more I arrive.

Can you taste the
medication
that is defining me?

Reviews

[Leslie Philibert]

Like the careful structure and the haunting visuality An empty cup....is great.You cleverly return to the image in the last stanza.Like the imagery The less I become......Well done.

[DanielleA94]

Loved it! The flow of the words and the Message it gives. It was captivating
"Once upon a time the cup held stars of amber; golden lights that shone" That was my favourite part! Well Done, A stunning piece of work.

[Cassie Fraga]

very deep... Love the take on perspective! very nice write indeed!
**tips my lyrical wand to you**

[Amplyyours]

I power in the refrain that moves the poem, it is like you took an old wives tales and weaved a life story around it. Beautiful

[tk]

this piece is very deep, i loved the message behind those words.. :) great flow, very interesting and intriguing statements.. i really enjoyed this!! ^_^

[sushi]

It was so powerful and carrying suspense about you.... The only word i could find is hats off...

[Manpreet]

A very powerful poem I needed to add.

[Groovy]

Very good piece

[Boldpen]

Truly wonderful piece.
You embedded such simple words into such a heart touching feeling.
Really great piece, It's flow was just amazing.
Nice job!

[Thea]

Simply wonderful...The flow in this poem is amazing...
:)))