We Surrender Honestly to This

this is a love poem, ordinary as such special things are.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

How your lotus eyes summons

The goodness in me, an honesty like

Your cheeks, begging my blood’s

Sudden flowering, I picture your eyes

Like the light of the world

 

Your summary skin, are like the petals

Where I once laid my racing youth

Your golden face, some miracled heritage

Tangled in your full and towering hair

 

I want my touch to last forever

I want to hear your voice as if,

To collect the words from your mouth

With my ears and my soul, to know your truth

 

As completely as anyone ever could

And find your heart in time, sprinkled in flour

And visit your dreams, like some daily bread ritual

I want to be with you, during our nightly travels

 

Find the purer motion, of your silken singular key

The kind of endless life and joy

Only you could provide me, that moist

Tender swan underwater feeling!

 

All travels and sorrows have to end

In encircled fire, like a good marriage or

A future land, some prosperity woven

Into the fabric of our future well-being

 

Pain and work shall all, but sleep now

Let the world propagate its own darkness

Instead we summon the light between us

For we both bow to the pulse, of a higher power.

 

15.11.2011

Author's Note

I'm sorry if I forget if I'm an "I" or a "We" just sometimes in our love stories, we lost a bit of our identities.

Reviews

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This poem is just absolutely divine. Your writing is beautiful and your descriptions are perfect. I see romance, I see admiration, I see majestic emotion, I see strength, I see courage, but mostly I see emotion and emotion by itself. It's hardly what they call raw, because you back it all up with an amazing fulfillment of poetry. Wow, you are a wonderful writer, and I can't find anything in this poem that I would change.

[Seshat Nidaba]

Wow this was before comments were possible! Sweet review Meg.

[Jessi Leigh]

Agh lekker! so many wonderful imageries, this has made me smile. -Your summary skin, are like the petals Where I once laid my racing youth - I loved this especially. There's nothing like feeling like a kid again and this sense of innocence fused within all the other emotions love taps into

[J. J. Nightingale]

The forever "We" .. Believe me it gets better and better .. And the we become the "One" .. sharing half the sorrow, and twice the joy ..

Nice . Jasmine ..

[Andrea Vargas]

This is a story within a poem, an illustration of love and all its qualities in the mind... This was brilliantely written and just very pleasing to the mind. I found myself indulged and lost in your words, drowned in the emotion and pleased with the ending. You have put your words together in a way that just shoots the word poet out and you have definately earned the honor of calling yourself a poet! Amazing write and a delight to read..

[Dayran]

Where a man was given a choice as to whether he wants to create the universe, the world or a woman, such a man chose a woman for the pleasure of the touch. And such a pleasure may have become the source of all pleasures. When he lost that love, he lost everything and realized that in his choices, he didn't also choose the option for a continuity of life. A nice poem.

[Kenneth The Poet]

Excellent work of art. Love propagates fully here.

[Seshat Nidaba]

I did try for Romance y'all, but maintly to symbolize love as the hope of existence.

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To collect the words from your mouth
With my ears and my soul, to know your truth

Instead we summon the light between us
For we both bow to the pulse, of a higher power.

This is an amazing poem, somewhat complex, but yet not. lol I feel it has a sense of romance. Loved the flow. Such desire in this.
An amazingly beautiful poem, enjoyed this one, for sure

[Coyote Poetry]

A amazing poem of love. Each set of lines opening the door to great desire and the joy of love. No weakness in the poem. I like the ending to the excellent poem.
Coyote

[Me]

sweet

[Victoria PoetryBunny]

Very nice. I love stanza 3 a lot. :)