We Surrender Honestly to This

this is a love poem, ordinary as such special things are.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

How your lotus eyes summons

The goodness in me, an honesty like

Your cheeks, begging my blood’s

Sudden flowering, I picture your eyes

Like the light of the world

 

Your summary skin, are like the petals

Where I once laid my racing youth

Your golden face, some miracled heritage

Tangled in your full and towering hair

 

I want my touch to last forever

I want to hear your voice as if,

To collect the words from your mouth

With my ears and my soul, to know your truth

 

As completely as anyone ever could

And find your heart in time, sprinkled in flour

And visit your dreams, like some daily bread ritual

I want to be with you, during our nightly travels

 

Find the purer motion, of your silken singular key

The kind of endless life and joy

Only you could provide me, that moist

Tender swan underwater feeling!

 

All travels and sorrows have to end

In encircled fire, like a good marriage or

A future land, some prosperity woven

Into the fabric of our future well-being

 

Pain and work shall all, but sleep now

Let the world propagate its own darkness

Instead we summon the light between us

For we both bow to the pulse, of a higher power.

 

15.11.2011

Author's Note

I'm sorry if I forget if I'm an "I" or a "We" just sometimes in our love stories, we lost a bit of our identities.

Reviews

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This poem is just absolutely divine. Your writing is beautiful and your descriptions are perfect. I see romance, I see admiration, I see majestic emotion, I see strength, I see courage, but mostly I see emotion and emotion by itself. It's hardly what they call raw, because you back it all up with an amazing fulfillment of poetry. Wow, you are a wonderful writer, and I can't find anything in this poem that I would change.

[Seshat Nidaba]

Wow this was before comments were possible! Sweet review Meg.

[sushi]

nice write... "Let the world propagate its own darkness", a thought expressed too differently....

[L]

This is amazing. I find love particularly difficult to express through poetry especially since you're saying what's already been said over and over again. Yours though, manages to capture it with imagery which is both beautiful and new :)

[light and ashes]

Gorgeous

[joshua deathdealer]

Oh... I haven't been this emotional over a poem in quite some time. This brings back so many fond memories... Thank you so much for sharing this.

[AJ Kristiansen]

You certainly are a master at love poetry Seshat. I love all that I read that you write and the images that you invoke are so beautiful and often something that I need to take away and let roll over and over in my mind to fully understand your meaning... I love it and it does my heart so much good to read your wonderful verse!! :)

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

The fierce thought behind the words, almost makes one feel dizzy, but in a well rounded way, well done, good read.

[Seshat Nidaba]

I miss your writing and your spirit.

[Christina]

Stunningly beautiful writing.

[Revolutionary]

This is what Valentine's reading is about.I am impressed with your love for another.I hope he loves me like this

[Desert Dreamer]

This is absolutely beautiful. Love poems are the most difficult thing to write, but you have done well with this one. I love the last two lines...to "summon the light between us", wow!

[Little Birdie]

Plain beautiful, perfect love poem.