The Box

The Box

A Poem by Mic
"

We all need a place for those special things...

"

The rifle barked, a sparrow fell,

and Tommy quickly feigned farewell;

he dared not dawdle on her watch

and madly whittled out the notch,

then dove amongst the hollyhocks

to fetch the feather for his box,

but Tommy tarried with his prey

before the watcher, Willa Dean Grey.


Ms. Willa knew young Tommy’s mind,

and all too well, the killing kind;

for this, though ruddy red-haired lad,

bore telltale traits of mind gone mad:

inscribing deeds done one by one

with keepsakes kept of each one done;

so oftentimes she bent his ear

but Tommy’s monster wouldn’t hear…


A rifle barked, no sparrow fell,

and Tommy never heard farewell,

though Willa whispered, “so long, son”

while calmly carving on her gun,

and then a tuft of auburn hair

was gently clipped and folded square,

then placed with love amongst those locks

in Willa Dean Grey’s most special box.

 

 

© 2012 Mic


Author's Note

Mic
Perhaps 'tis true... the apple falls not far from the tree.

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i like how you kept it short...it attacks the reader then reluctantly lets go at the end...but we feel the shots...and are left shaking, glad it wasn't we who were shot.

she won't let him grow up like her. and it starts often with animals or birds...and then moves on to humans.

i like this and will want to read more from you...

this is my favorite genre.

you do it well.

jacob

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Mic

12 Years Ago

Hi Jacob, and welcome to my page. I've written rather lengthy ones and do enjoy the genre as well, b.. read more



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Ooh, sinister ending! I enjoyed reading this poem, it has a gripping story, good rhymes, and nice rhythm. Well done!

Posted 9 Years Ago


Mic

9 Years Ago

So glad you enjoyed it! Thank you for your time, Silent!
Very cool, I liked this from top to bottom. Great story, fantastic rhyme and meter. Nice one.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Mic

11 Years Ago

Thank you for your time reading as well as commenting, Jack.
It's like... Southern Poe. Excellent

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Mic

11 Years Ago

Thank you Steven, really enjoy your poetry.
This gave me goosebumps! I wanna see what's in Willa's special box. ...kinda.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Mic

11 Years Ago

Thank you for the visit, Angi!
Angi

11 Years Ago

My pleasure! Just so you know, I really like this. The way it flows and creepily builds, that last.. read more
Beautiful

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Mic

12 Years Ago

Thank you Tate, for you time reading as well as commenting.
Tate Morgan

12 Years Ago

I dont absorb things as fast as some i have to read things as my mind settles and sometimes twice
A lot of times, when poets attempt to tell actual stories, the tempo suffers, and the rhyming seems forced. Not so here. The story was clearly told, the rhythm of the piece flowed naturally, and the rhymes were spot on. Add to that I had chills pretty much through the entire read...exceptionally well done.

-kimmer

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Mic

12 Years Ago

Hello kimmer. To be honest, this isn't my favorite rhyme scheme, but was trying to move it along qui.. read more
i like how you kept it short...it attacks the reader then reluctantly lets go at the end...but we feel the shots...and are left shaking, glad it wasn't we who were shot.

she won't let him grow up like her. and it starts often with animals or birds...and then moves on to humans.

i like this and will want to read more from you...

this is my favorite genre.

you do it well.

jacob

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Mic

12 Years Ago

Hi Jacob, and welcome to my page. I've written rather lengthy ones and do enjoy the genre as well, b.. read more
a gripping storyline, depicted brilliantly, very well done Mic

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Mic

12 Years Ago

You're much too kind, SHEEMA, and I truly appreciate your gift of time. Thank you.
Often, it doesn't. In this case, I hope Willa's grim deed saved the world from a killer. Excellent creepy, Halloween-appropriate writing, Mic.

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Mic

12 Years Ago

Thank you Sam. Always appreciate your comments. Hope all is well in your part of our great state.
This poem uses rhyming perfectly.
It has a consistent flow to it.

You wrote a very good poem.
Thanks for sharing!

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Mic

12 Years Ago

Thank you Aaron. Wasn't really crazy about the structure of this one, but was aiming for brevity.read more

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