Lady castaway

There lies a lady castaway,

up where her lonely lattice lay,

a tiny, tangled hideaway

of shadow sheltered disarray;

        shy this spinster ever weaving,

        while a widow never grieving

lustful lovers, long passé,

who dared stray and see her prey.

Keen are they who heed her sway,

fleet afoot and on their way;

        for the suitor disbelieving,

        mesmerized with misconceiving,

shall meet the maker in her fray

and feel her feed this judgement day.

So, woo the weaver if you may,

but widowed, always, she will stay.

Author's Note

Am always in awe of the spider, and the widow is one of my favorites. She's painted a bit darkly here, perhaps, but it is as we know her.

The structure of this verse is a bit odd. The count and meter are reversed in the second stanza, which made it most fun to pen. Can't seem to pen lines without rhyme and hope the common rhyme used throughout made it a bit less obtrusive for those who dislike it.

Reviews

[Wicked Dahlia]

i really enjoyed the flow and rhyming scheme of this. i'm always a bit envious of those who are so easy with rhymes :) The Widow may be painted a bit darkly but that may be because we like her best this way. She's strong and dangerous, more complex than others perhaps.

[Mic]

Am so glad you enjoyed it, Dahlia. No need for envy, though, as I fear it's the only way the words will align for me and makes any other style impossible. Thank you so much for reading and the time for comment!

[Angi]

This is really good! Loved the rhyme scheme. The last line was perfect. I feel bad for her mates. Almost. Angi~

[Mic]

Almost...lol. Would agree. Is always nice to see the males of a species directly involved with feeding their young. ;)

[Angi]

Ha! You make me laugh!

[Angi]

I just realized that you are the person who wrote, 'The Box.' That story has stuck with me. Awesome awesome, creepy stuff, there. Just wanted you to know. Angi~

[Mic]

Thank you Angi!

[Peace]

"As great minds have the faculty of saying a great deal in a few words, so lesser minds have a talent of talking much, and saying nothing."

Quote
Francois de La Rochefoucauld

[lee von cleef]

to whip a spider down the sink,swirling into a little ball,just to find her starring back in my morning shave.Tough little fiddle on her back,rotted the flesh around her nibble,next time ,I 'll squash the little B***h.

[Mic]

Ha! I see you're motivated by spiders. Had a widow in a kitchen cabinet a few weeks and never knew she was there... 'til she strolled out into the light and died.

Thanks so much for visiting my page and leaving such a great comment!

[lee von cleef]

There is a camel spider with a I pod in Iraq ,crossing a Marine's lap the I Pod and Spider flew neither one ever seen again,made for one happy spider, one whiny Marine.

[Trisha C.]

Very good poem. It flows well and makes the reader think. I like it.

[Mic]

Thank you Trisha, for reading as well as commenting!

[Muse]

I've already reviewed this...but now I see why you liked my Black widow. And I must say...it's fun to play with rhyme and meter. That's how you can create new original ways to deliver a poem. I say f**** the rules of writing. What's the fun in being techincal...find your own game...pen it your own way.

[Mic]

Amen! Fear I go as far to create my own words at times. And rarely get caught... ;)

Thank you Muse'.

[Anniebugg]

I have a difficult time reading poems without the rhyme, so this is already one up for me. At first I didn't realize this was about a spider but when it dawned on me, as I read, I thought it pretty clever. She is a sly little devil... her admirers none the wiser. Wonder how many of them realize too late... oh hell no! Is she nibbling a bit harder than necessary on my ear? :) Great poem Mic, I love it!

[Mic]

Haha! Would bet it quite the surprise. Remember reading that some do escape, though it would seem a proper father's inclination would be to help feed his young... directly or, at least, indirectly. ;)

Thank you for taking the time to read as well as comment!

[Muse]

Charlotte's web at it's best. It is a mesmerizing site...the enigma of a spider, she is so simple..yet so complex in her way of design. She was engineered to be one of a kind.

[Mic]

Most true. Usually such brief encounters, for on her toes and away she goes...

Thank you for reading and also the time to comment!

[Baby Ricochet]

Great rhyming structure. Outstanding!!

[Mic]

Thank you, Ric, and for taking the time to read and comment as well.

[Tate Morgan]

i liked the structure Very nice

[Mic]

Thank you, Tate. Know you're a stickler for structure as well. Have almost as much fun with it as I do the content.

Thanks again for your time... reading as well as commenting.

[Tate Morgan]

You are welcome yes I am quite a stickler on that it is only a personal preference not a guideline .Very nice