I Love You2

The simplest verse for the day the heart swells 'til you just must shout it...

‘Though gently murmured ‘tween the lips

          is often all need said,

this day (my love) the oral scripts

          ring truer somehow read.

So penned on parchment, etched in stone

          for all the worlds to see,

this love for you and you alone

          once rumored now must be-

A scream from mighty mountains’ peaks

          ‘cross every grand plateau,

resounding softly whilst it seeks

          out those who not yet know…

Then drifting o’er the emerald seas

          ‘long rivers, lakes, and streams,

‘til just a whisper in a breeze

          inspiring lovers’ dreams.

‘Tis just the start and as we go

          forevermore I’ll swear-

you’ll see and hear and feel and know

          I love you everywhere.

　　

Reviews

[jacob erin-cilberto]

so like Poe...and i love Poe

great rhythm to this...

"i love you everywhere"

everywhere you go, everywhere i go...

made me think of Phenomenon...and Travolta's line when he asks kyra sedgwick if she would love him for the rest of his life...and her response is "No, i will love you for the rest of mine."

really good stuff here and such a change of pace from the other i read from you, you are quite versatile with your style and words.

jacob

[Mic]

I loved that movie, and Poe as well!

Yes, everywhere for always.

This is quite a bit different from the others I've posted here, but it's probably the easiest in style and structure for me. A very simple piece, but I so love simple. Was actually written for someone, and there's a rather complex story tucked between those simple lines.

Thank you very much for so much of your time, Jacob. I honestly appreciate it.

[Viv Wade]

What a beautiful poem, it reads like a classic. Lovely rhyme and rhythm, again. Thanks for sharing this!

[Mic]

Thank you, Silent!

[Angi]

Yes! Shout it from the mountaintops! Angi~

[Mic]

Amen!...and thank you, Angi!

[DrD]

The oldest of themes and yet resounding like something new. This is a nice piece of work and I enjoyed it greatly.

[Mic]

Thank you very much for your kind words, DrD.

[Marie Baskerville]

this is such a beautiful poem... i love your rhythm.. it flows perfectly

[Mic]

Thank you Marie, I really appreciate your reading and wonderful comment.

[Gray Witch]

Beautiful words and verse...metronomically satisfying .... makes one jealous ...

[Mic]

Thank you Gray, for reading as well as commenting!

[Muse]

I feel the dance of old verse..your word play is light and care free.

‘Tis just the start and as we go

forevermore I’ll swear-

you’ll see and hear and feel and know

I love you everywhere.



Like an echo...these words could be felt everywhere. A song in a breeze...a whistle amongst the trees.

[Mic]

Ah, you've sensed it perfectly. Thank you Muse'.

[Muse]

welcome

[Anniebugg]

Still a wonderful story. :)

[Mic]

Thank you Ms. Annie', and welcome to the site! Is a story as old as the... ;)

[Sheila Kline]

And another poem of absolute wonderful meter, and rhyme.....a wonderful write of love. I can almost hear you telling it to the whole world, all the way across the emerald seas!
Lovely!!!

[Mic]

Thank you again for reading, as well as the wonderful comment! Am so glad you could hear it as it was meant to be heard!

[Emma Ruth]

Aw, this is so lovely; I love the idea of it reaching over seas and becoming just a whisper in the air, everywhere, just quietly there - that's really nice :)

[Mic]

Aw... and thank you Emma, for reading as well as commenting!