It's over

He left me, again. I wrote this 2 hours after with tears in my eyes. Please enjoy.

Everything is wonderful , at least for a while

Then something triggers this bad day

The world feels like it’s standing still

One wrong move and it’s over

Bam , you did it, that was the one

His car drives away, leaving you in its dust

The air you breathe is sucked away

The lights that once lit you up all just went out

The butterflies that once lived in you tummy just dropped dead

You call , no answer

Try again says your brain

36 times later still nothing

You start over thinking it

You are a bad person

You are worthless

You mean nothing to no one

These thoughts they flood your body

A text

He can’t do this

You’re not enough for him

He loves you but he can’t feel like this anymore

Then it’s over

Author's Note

Please give honest opinions, though do not tear me down for I am obviously very broken.

Reviews

[boobalajcushion]

This is so lovely, gave me a few shivers. Thank you for your sharing. I've only just joined this site for a little more confidence, I love to write but feel it's so personal which makes me nervous to share. But it's so lovely to do so. I've often felt similar things when it comes to love, but know you are so whole and worthy, never let a relationship determine your self. Smile lovely x

[ForgottenGirl]

thank you ever so much for your very kind words. I hope you know how much positive people, like yourself, mean to someone going through hard times. It is okay to write about personal experiences , they make some of the best pieces. Thank you so much I am working very hard to move past it!

[boobalajcushion]

If you ever need someone to chat to, I'm an open ear. I've moved through some very dark times and recently only started coming out into the light myself. Helpful tips would include practising mindfulness and cognitive therapy with a dedicated passion, if you fancy it. It's hard, but the pure happiness you experience when the work pays off is absolutely worth it. Still get bad days, but they're so much easier managed. Keep writing! :)

[Mr.Write]

I think overthinking is one word, and the "you" in the ninth stanza should be "your."

Watch out for leaving too much space between commas - as in if a word comes before a comma then there should be no space there: "Bam , you..."

The worry, the uncertainty and the hurt is felt, but also the teenage angst. You'll get better if you keep writing though I think this poem was mainly written to vent.

[breakthebrokenone]

This is so so beautiful. the imagery you use is lovely. when I was a teenager, I felt this way and I am so happy someone has managed to put it into words