Bouquet of Withered Flowers

I thought two hearts were better than one

That our grey skies were better than none

How wrong I was

I should beg your forgiveness

But you’ll see me weak

 

Was your hold to keep me safe?

Or just to keep me

I don’t have anywhere to go

And yet I need to leave

 

Don’t breathe

I don’t want forever

I want the promise that death will part us

‘You don’t know what you’ve got till you’ve got it”

 

No love, not even hate

Just flaccid indifference

And I really am sorry

Reviews

[Lydia Shutter]

I think indifference is even worse than hate. Your poetry is consistently emotive. The images are wonderful. Very good work. Lydi**

[Mia]

I am an emotional person; I suppose that reflects in the things I write. Thank you Lydi…have a lovely day :)

[anxia]

Love each and every line. Ah you are so good at describing feelings!

[Mia]

Thank you lovely...don't know why I missed your reviews ...sorry for that x

[anxia]

Its okay :).

[KAOlmsted]

I'm going to use these as my wedding vows *laugh* Seriously, you've just summed up my entire relationship...(I wish I was kidding)

:-D

[Mia]

Me too, I wish you were kidding too! Don't use this as your vows...don't marry him!

[KAOlmsted]

Aww, don't worry about me ;-) We've been throwing the idea around for 11 years...we're comfy. Very good write, if I forgot to mention it above. xoxo

[Mia]

Not worry...you're a tough cookie. I just wish more for you than being comfy...I'm young and naive...I still believe in a fiery passionate love...LOL!
Thank you :)
xoxo

[KAOlmsted]

Well...when 40 comes and goes, you'll appreciate the comfort ;-) (We have our moments, though *wink-wink, nudge-nudge*) :-D

[Mia]

:D

[Baby Ricochet]

Nice rhythm and flow/

[Mia]

Thanks Baby :)

[John Alexander McFadyen]

At times Mia we don't know our own complicated emotions and you set this out so well in this poem. It feels like a mix of feelings jumbled like clothes in a tumble drier. Sad but tinged with longing and uncertainty.

[Mia]

Two visits...lucky me. Thank you John :)
Hope you're well!

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Well I respond to 99% of my read requests and I realised that I never seem to get them from you so I thought I had better come find you and I will read more.

[Mia]

:D

[That_Girl]

The picture and title tie into your words quite well. I absolutely LOVE how you ended it. Just flaccid indifference-- oh yes. Yes ma'am! I love that.

I have subscribed to you but for some stupid reason, you don't show up in my subs.
-_- That's getting annoying.

I JUST realized you live in South Africa; I've always adored that accent....sigh...anyhoo... great poem, sweetness. :)

[Mia]

Hello Avy :)
Thank you! It's always lovely to have you by (so to speak) :)
GRRRR...who shall I beat up to get that problem fixed?! LOL
Cool that you've met South Africans :D we have 11 languages here so I can't be sure I have the same accent but I'm going with yes just because I love beginning adored ~_^

[That_Girl]

Always welcome. :)

The admin? Hmmm I'm not sure, but that is BS. ;)

Yesss. I have friends (a couple) that were from Johannesburg and I'm in love with the way they talk... it's just amazing haha

[Mia]

I'm moving to Johannesburg next year...to start real life and stuff! Weird...I'm excited that you know people from Joburg!!

[That_Girl]

Hahaha awesome! :D Real life? Is that good or bad? :)

[Mia]

I'm not sure yet, moving in with my boyfriend...which is exciting but I'm going to miss being a student :( real job, real bills...not so great, LOL!!

[That_Girl]

Ooh la la! ;) I hope you have fun. Hahaha yes, not so great. I'm sure you'll do fine though. Good luck! :D

[Mia]

Thank you :D
xoxo

[That_Girl]

Un and resubscribed.... double checked... YES! You are in my subs! Woo! :D

[Mia]

YAY! I wasn't really sure I could take admin!!

[That_Girl]

Hahaha no need to fight anymore! ;D

[Mia]

:D
xx

[MOON]

Poignant write, Mia written with heart and last three lines speaks volumes.

[Mia]

Thanks for stopping by, its always a pleasure!

[Shimmerbliss/CAF]

"I thought two hearts were better than one
That our grey skies were better than none"

Again, you start right off with lines that set the tone and portent what will come. This is honest and sad, that lonely place when there is just nothing left, not even the care to really try.
‘You don’t know what you’ve got till you’ve got it” Great line especially.

Nice work and realistic.

[Mia]

Did I mention you're absolutely wonderful? You are!! Thank you so much!

[emmajoy]

So, yes, you found a title but maybe at first it was difficult because there are some emotions we can't name because our emotions are such a bewildered jumble there's no one root cause ..
Such a sad post, Mia, yet wonderfully fluent - not sure how you managed that, but you did, Those last three lines .. oh my, dear girl, they speak chapter and verse.

[Mia]

I'm not even sure where this came from; it was there and wouldn't leave so I wrote it down. It makes me sad because I'm happy and in love and yet I’m writing of things that betray that. Anyhow, thank you Emma and welcome back :)

[emmajoy]

Sometimes tis best to lay things out in front of one, see them for they are, mull them over .. sleep on them, not make rash decisions, never that. If things are meant to happen, i really do believe they will, sweet heart. Your pic shows such a beautiful couple .. keep looking at it, feel it. You do, don't you?!

[Mia]

Why are you so wonderful?! I do, often and I count my blessing...I have many and I refuse to take them for granted! Emotions seem to have a mind and life of their own...when I don't get them, I leave them be and wait...they always come around

[emmajoy]

Nothing wiser than a wise woman! :))) (yes, I know, quite a few will argue with that!)