Leave me out with the waste

Obsessed seemed too clichéd

I want to invade your subconscious

Be the dirt beneath your fingernails

So deep you couldn’t get me out

Without breaking your skin

 

I want to be the wine that escapes

The glass and runs free on your lips

Until you lick me up, take me in.

 

I want to be the stethoscope

That sits on your chest

Separated from every heartbeat

Only by skin, bones, muscle, blood.

 

I want to be your full length mirror

Watching you dress-undress

Capturing you and every movement you make

 

I want to be the blanket on your bed

Wrap me tightly around you

When you’re cold or when you’re not

 

I want to not be a stranger to you

Beautiful someone

Reviews

[emmajoy]

What a wonderful list of wants.. full of desire, full of gentle love touches. This is written with great care, technically and emotionally, perhaps your best, certainly memorable. 'I want to not be a stranger to you Beautiful someone'

Leaves me smiling, slightly sad, but applauding, Mia.

[Mia]

Thank you Emma! I sent the most time writing this one, I'm glad it paid off. Your review leaves me smiling with not a hint of sadness :)

[KAOlmsted]

Kind of creepy, this *laugh* A bit like a stalker's lament ;-) Probably why I like it so much.

One teeny tiny silly little thing, not even worth mentioning, except if I don't I won't be able to sleep tonight *laugh* Instead of dirt "between" fingernails, I wonder if dirt "beneath" fingernails might bring the point home with more punch.

Really good stuff.
-kimmer

[Mia]

My friend and I debated if it was "dirt within" or "dirt between" I never thought of beneath...sigh! You are a gem! It's been bothering me because surely it must be between two things. And you don’t get dirt between the actual finger and the nail. Thank you for that!!!! You are the first person to see that creepy aspect! YAY for that! A stalker's lament…it is exactly that!
I’m so glad you stopped by and even more so that you mentioned that one teeny tiny silly little thing.
Wonderful you :D

[KAOlmsted]

:-D So happy I helped. And it was my pleasure.

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

That is what I call desire and passion... the second verse is my favorite.

[Mia]

Thank you Dale :)

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

My pleasure.

[Pax]

a passionate, passionate, passionate write for someone who touch your inner desires... this is such a beautiful write, sad in a way, still pleasurable read!
Great work my friend.

[Mia]

Thank you wonderful Pax! I appreciate you stopping by :)

[MOON]

Beautiful write Mia , a tribute to a great love , love the first verse particularlyI want to invade your subconscious

Be the dirt between your fingernails

So deep you couldn’t get me out

Without breaking your skin

[Mia]

Thank you Moon :)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

sorry i just don't have the words to give you a longer comment.

this just blew me away...i love the concepts and the way you worded each and every one of them.

jacob

[Mia]

No need to be sorry! I appreciate this review as much as any other Jacob :)

[Horizon K.]

This definitely captures the feeling of those crushes that run deeper then obsession! I love how each part draws from a different something that is an intimate part of his life. Great imagery!

[Mia]

Thanks Horizon :)

[DrD]

The nagging need to belong to someone is one of the most haunting themes we find in writing and you have captured it well, Mia. I was absorbed by this work and send you my kudos

[Mia]

I'm glad for that! Thank you Doc.