Trigger unhappy

Trigger unhappy

 

Paper…you wrote on it

Tore it and crumbled it

Now you want to straighten it.

I dare you to try.

Or better yet tell it you’re sorry

Did it work?

 

Don’t look to me for comfort

Don’t look to me for peace

 

I’d like to peel off your skin

Soak you in acid

I’m not hoping for your death

I can’t watch you suffer in that peaceful slumber

My happiness begins with your demise

 

Don’t look to me for comfort

Don’t look to me for peace

 

The love is gone

Unspeakable truths

Embedded in my irises

Suck it in

I know you’re sorry

A wasteless revelry

 

Don’t look to me for comfort

Don’t look to me for peace

 

I am done

You have won

Wishing for more ways

To tell you to go

F**K yourself

 

Reviews

[Boy of the red]

i love thwe first stanza! great write!

[Mia]

Thank you :)

[That_Girl]

"Trust is like a paper; once crumpled it can't be perfect again"

This poem, while much harsher than that quote, reminded me of it. One can only f**k another person over so many times before that person just says "I'm done". I loved this! Well done! :D

[Mia]

I'm glad you enjoyed this. I enjoyed imagining him screaming while I tortured him...unfortunately I had to settle for just writing about it :P
Thank you, thank you!

[That_Girl]

Haha I know the feeling all too well! Then again, sometimes violence IS the answer haha

[Mia]

If only we could convince the justice system of that...hahaha

[That_Girl]

lol the justice system in my brain is quite convinced! ;)

[Mia]

HAHAHAHA! Avy you're too funny :)

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

I’d like to peel off your skin
Soak you in acid
I’m not hoping for your death

damn girl you certainly held nothing back here... I agree that death is not a way to punish someone, seeing them suffer the way they did their victims is better suited.

[Mia]

“Heaven has no rage like love to hatred turned,
Nor hell a fury like a woman scorned.”
read more“Heaven has no rage like love to hatred turned,
Nor hell a fury like a woman scorned.”
I wanted to add maggots eating his flesh but I thought people might think I was crazy…LOL!

[Pax]

an angry write, if they've one then let it be... it's a lesson now that you've learned...
Well expressed emotions my friend...

[Mia]

Thank you my friend!

[DrD]

Men know quite well that women have feelings far more intense than they and yet they cause them to be angry. I would rather face a pack of rabid pit bulls. This isn't one of those "Now tell me what you really think" pieces. You said it all and washed your hands and I enjoyed it more because it wasn't directed to me.

[Mia]

Ah man what are we to do with them! Thanks Doc

[Kaylor Mason]

I would not like to be the guy to whom this is written to

[Mia]

HAHA :) thanks for the read

[Steven]

That piece STINGS. Not sure if I like the last repetition. Seems to come down too much off the "F**K yourself". But this is potent. A pure piece of hatred, venomous. I can only imagine what deserved it. Which in a way is the charm of the piece.

[Mia]

I wasn't sure about it either but then I thought it would be weird if I didn't include the last repetition. Should I lose it?

[Steven]

I would, it's still symmetrical without it, and I feel the refrain was done enough leave its impression

[Steven]

But you know, YOU have to really feel it's better without it, otherwise keep it :)

[Mia]

I'm going to go with you on this one :)