Fluffy rainbows

I wrote the weird things I think down :)

I’m not sure how it started

Maybe you were yelling, maybe I wasn’t

Both equally as hateful, both meant to burn

I would fight with you if I cared enough

You would cover me in compliments

And you know, I know

They’re the sweet kind, soaked in lies

Remember that time when you were

Romantically in-love with me

I was too...almost

But I always loved you loving me

Now you feel like

My cold toes in wet shoes on a rainy day.

Water everywhere

Running down and chasing the make up

Into my eyes

You sting and I want to hurt you

But instead I’ll say

“Figure out how to have a threesome

With two people”

You’ll be confused and then

Ah...yes!

Rage, I've been waiting for you

Remember that time when I promised you

I’d be unstable, you laughed

Maybe because somewhere along the line

Everyone broke promises

Sometimes I hoped I would too

But mostly I didn’t

Not so funny now

I got the last laugh

It never reaches my lips

Sometimes I wish you would just leave

Then maybe I would stop you

Not forever, never forever

Just long enough to let you

Whisper kisses to me

I’ll make a new promise

I’ll promise to be a silly fool

Like the ones who dance on fluffy rainbows

And you’ll be happy again

Because once you were romantically in love with me

Reviews

[Patrick]

such an infectious piece of writing...those first two verses are so compelling...enjoyed the wet toes analogy a great deal.
The third verse confuses me slightly but maybe its a personal touch that I can't work out...
and then that title 'fluffy rainbows' - can these be sold, bought and eaten :)

loved it and im sure many more will

[Mia]

Only in my sweetest dreams can you buy and eat 'fluffy rainbow'. They’re delicious :P
There is nothing worse than fighting with someone who just doesn’t care. The third stanza is just that. She knows if she fights back, he’ll be happy that at least she cares so instead she says something completely random and out of place. She is fighting back without giving him the satisfaction and still getting the same result. He is enraged.
Thank you so much!!

[Patrick]

thanks for clarifying....:)
I might look on amazon for them

[Southern Cross]

Welcome to the ways a woman thinks P.J. Glad you're clarified now LOL

[Patrick]

clarified like butter..

[TheJordBaker]

I was gripped reading this, hung on every word because what you were saying was pure, real and from the heart. That sort of thing makes writing wonderful and effortless. The last two stanzas were magical, the strongest of the piece, which as I say- I thoroughly enjoyed. More of the same Mia!! :)

[Mia]

No pressure, lol!
Thank you so much Jordan, I'm glad you were gripped. I really enjoyed writing this so it’s that much more rewarding when people like it *happy dance*

[Steven]

Nice :). I like what came from that title!

Not so funny now
I got the last laugh
It never reaches my lips

Some great wit as well as feeling here. Dug it.

[Mia]

Thanks Steven, I had fun with it!

[Matty Bosox]

Well according to this Mia....I would never wanna mess with you in means of a relationship...So extremely brilliant and very wickedly beautiful in every way....Sooo many poems about love and relationships anymore but this one is very smart and strays away from the boring and content...You leap into an excting and decievingly wonderful use of words...You are definitly one of the best writers I have had the pleasure of following...Keep it up:o)

[Mia]

Hahahahaha :) Matty…I’m perfectly harmless, most of the time anyways :P
Thank you, thank you…a thousand times thank you! Your reviews make me smile and I appreciate your confidence in me. I wish to see myself through your eyes. Maybe it’s good that I don’t that way I’ll keep trying to be better.

[Matty Bosox]

Yeah I'm the same way Mia...I always think my writing is just mediocre at best...But your right...it does make you try harder..Thats the beauty of it I guess

[Pax]

i really thought this was a happy poem base on the title...but i guess wrong... maybe because that was the intentional feeling before... of the girl who doesn't love this person anymore...she's just being real in her part...or should i say more honest now...
I really like this line:
"compliments And you know, I know They’re the sweet kind, soaked in lies"
~yes true at times of deceit...
well done my friend.

[Mia]

I told someone I'm a fluffy rainbows kind of person and he said he liked that and I should write about it. I thought about it and fluffy rainbows seemed like a hiding place more than a happy one and I got carried away with those thoughts and this was born.
I have no problem accepting compliments but sometimes both people know it's a lie and the person giving the compliment is just filling the silence with lies hoping you'll believe them.
"The best part of beLIEve is the lie" fall out boy said it best.
Thank you Pax :)

[Pax]

*smiles* i guess that's how it goes...like mind over matter...if you kept of believing you can do it... there is nothing wrong in taking this fact to reality... because imagination is the key... its gives confince in some people... but then again its does matter of the situation your in... i think believing is a complicated emotion...that needs more understanding....
and i can say your bright as the rainbow my friend...

You're welcome!

[Mia]

As are you my friend :D

[Pax]

pardon typo *confidence*...:)

[P.S.Chance]

I really like the line, 'cold toes in wet shoes on a rainy day'. what an uncomfortable feeling and you described it so well!

[Mia]

That's my favourite line too :)