Fluffy rainbows

I wrote the weird things I think down :)

I’m not sure how it started

Maybe you were yelling, maybe I wasn’t

Both equally as hateful, both meant to burn

I would fight with you if I cared enough

You would cover me in compliments

And you know, I know

They’re the sweet kind, soaked in lies

Remember that time when you were

Romantically in-love with me

I was too...almost

But I always loved you loving me

Now you feel like

My cold toes in wet shoes on a rainy day.

Water everywhere

Running down and chasing the make up

Into my eyes

You sting and I want to hurt you

But instead I’ll say

“Figure out how to have a threesome

With two people”

You’ll be confused and then

Ah...yes!

Rage, I've been waiting for you

Remember that time when I promised you

I’d be unstable, you laughed

Maybe because somewhere along the line

Everyone broke promises

Sometimes I hoped I would too

But mostly I didn’t

Not so funny now

I got the last laugh

It never reaches my lips

Sometimes I wish you would just leave

Then maybe I would stop you

Not forever, never forever

Just long enough to let you

Whisper kisses to me

I’ll make a new promise

I’ll promise to be a silly fool

Like the ones who dance on fluffy rainbows

And you’ll be happy again

Because once you were romantically in love with me

Reviews

[Patrick]

such an infectious piece of writing...those first two verses are so compelling...enjoyed the wet toes analogy a great deal.
The third verse confuses me slightly but maybe its a personal touch that I can't work out...
and then that title 'fluffy rainbows' - can these be sold, bought and eaten :)

loved it and im sure many more will

[Mia]

Only in my sweetest dreams can you buy and eat 'fluffy rainbow'. They’re delicious :P
There is nothing worse than fighting with someone who just doesn’t care. The third stanza is just that. She knows if she fights back, he’ll be happy that at least she cares so instead she says something completely random and out of place. She is fighting back without giving him the satisfaction and still getting the same result. He is enraged.
Thank you so much!!

[Patrick]

thanks for clarifying....:)
I might look on amazon for them

[Southern Cross]

Welcome to the ways a woman thinks P.J. Glad you're clarified now LOL

[Patrick]

clarified like butter..

[TLK]

"Rage, Ive been waiting for you" needs an apostrophe for the contraction.

[Mia]

I fixed it, thank you.

[Frieda P]

I'm in love with 'fluffy rainbows', great read. My imagination took me to your viewpoint, which wasn't difficult to do with your descriptive words. It's charming.

[KAOlmsted]

Just happened to glance at the featured review and noticed some confusion about that third stanza...I was going to say "I love the third stanza" because, to me, it rather sounds like you're telling the guy to go f**k himself *laugh* God, I sincerely hope that's what you're saying, because that is CLASSIC...

Okay. As for a proper review...honestly, Mia, I don't know how you manage to do this, but every single piece of yours I read I find myself on the edge of my seat...you're so good at writing these scenes of raw emotion that resonate for hours, sometimes DAYS after I read them...I try to take you in small doses, otherwise I'd be driven to distraction and would get sweet f**k-all done *laugh* I'm so happy I got my fix today...

-kimmer

[Mia]

WHOA! I need a moment, Kimmer, wow thank you!! What do I even say to this!!
That's exactly what it is...telling him to go f**k himself in a way you know will piss him off the most :D
Again, thank you so much! I started writing poems on here and my first few ones are awkward...LOL...I like that though. It's literally my growth documented :) I can't say thank you enough!!!

[KAOlmsted]

:-D Yay! I'm so glad that's what you meant...I'm sooooo going to use that one on my Brit ;-) (I tell him to go f**k himself often; this will make a nice change) *laugh*

My absolute pleasure...I Love your work, with a capital L.

[Mia]

If you're not careful you're going to make me fall in love with you! All this flattery...LOL!
xoxo

[KAOlmsted]

HA! You're already in love with me...who do you think breathed life into Nic??? *LAUGH* xoxo back at ya ;-)

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Oh Mia this is a wonderous piece. so much hurt but so much forgiveness and love. You are so special and you write such lovely poems.

[Mia]

Big smile, warm heart and many thank yous

[C.C. Marx]

huh not what i was expecting when i saw fluffy rainbows, you surprised me, in a great way of course

[Mia]

Thank you :)

[Kriss_Rose]

I love this. Why? Because I think we have all been there. The hurt but feeling empty about it. I also love "the ones who dance on fluffy rainbows". Just beautiful and a lot of imagery.

[Mia]

Thank you Kriss! I am glad you enjoyed it!

[Sid]

Very nice poem, somewhat twisted emotions, but very well brought out. The wording was perfect and the emotions raw and real...Great write!!

[Mia]

Thank you very much!
I appreciate that :)

[Damien Davison]

I enjoyed reading this, it stung to read almost! Nicely done!

[Mia]

Thank you! I appreciate your time and comments :)

[Erinne S.]

There is great depth to this piece, emotion is fully packed into every word. Your word choices were perfect for this piece, made the flow of it perfect, in my opinion. Great job!

~Erinne

[Mia]

Thank you so much Erinne :)

[Mia]

Ooh I love the title, very brilliant, as for the poem your line Now you feel like My cold toes in wet shoes on a rainy day." Just amazing... Loved it! Very creative girl xx

[Mia]

Thank you!! The title came before the actual poem; I must admit it's my favourite part of this whole piece. Again thank you soooo much xx

Thanks to you for this wonderful piece, you are always welcome xx :)

[Mia]

:)