Sadness and teardrops

Wrong side of the bed, I suppose.

If I’m dying, take me fast

Where is your mercy, my Lord?

I keep praying

Anguish building wildly

And I am desperate for love

But only if it’s yours

Why won’t you stop the raindrops?

As they fall from my face

Somehow my dark soul succeeds

In capturing them

I fight it

With the little strength I pretend to have

My disgraceful attempts are laughable

Silently screaming as I drown

Still desperate for love

But only if it’s yours

 

Author's Note

Have you woken up feeling completely distressed? Not really knowing where it came from. Hands shaking from emotions you don’t want to feel. I’m having one of those days.

Reviews

[TheJordBaker]

this is beautiful Mia. I'm no stranger to days like these, and I feel every word of this because I have them and because my faith gave me the strength to pull myself through them. You captured it wonderfully.
the ability to make such feelings into art is a gift, and you certainly have it!!
well done :)

[Mia]

Thank you Jordan, I don't even know what to say! It means more because I think you're an incredible writer. All smiles for the rest of the evening, that's for sure :D

[TheJordBaker]

Thank you Mia!! No problem at all, my pleasure :D

[Sid]

I think everyone has those days, you wake up feeling lonely and utterly empty, but you can never explain why...this is really emotional poem and very well written.Great work!!

[Mia]

WOW :) Thank you...you're really making my day!

[Sid]

I keep reading because your writings are brilliant!!Though I need leave now, I'll continue once I get back to my place.Bye!!

[Mia]

Wonderful you :D

[Southern Cross]

We all have these days...It is because we are filled with passion..We are intense and so are our emotions..besides it makes for creative. blissful poetry . This is one fine example where the soul and heart meet in a beautiful penned write..

[Mia]

I love this review! Not just because you said such wonderful things, although that was great! You have a wonderful way of looking at things. We are indeed passionate intense being. Thank you so much!

[Southern Cross]

My pleasure always :)

[Enid Blake]

I think the emotions were made even more potent with the use of the large font. Clever idea ;)

[Mia]

Thank you, I appreciate your kind comments and more than that, your time!

[Jack Reaper]

i think weve all been here. its almost like not waking really, i just lie there and wish for sleep to come again, something to take me away from the despair that has no business being there to begin with. it creeps up on you through the night and sets inside your soul. a desperation yearning for some sort of love (to me that can include the love of a friend as well, just someone to talk to.).
excellent piece, it really captures that distress well.

[Mia]

Thank you Jack, I appreciate your time and your kind comments. You got where I was coming from, and I loved the way you described it...coming in your sleep and setting inside your soul.

[Aaron]

God that brings me back to depressing times.

It was a great read. It really made me remember the times when I felt alone and confused.

It dragged me in with the first line "If I'm dying, take me fast"
That is an amazing start.

Thanks for sharing.

[Mia]

Thank you for stopping by :) and for your kind comments! I'm glad you 'felt' alone and confused as opposed to are 'feeling' them :)

[Caradoc]

Yea. I've had plenty of those days. Feeling anger or sadness, depression, and having absolutely no idea where it all came from. I hate days like that. I'm always so irritable, a terrible person to be around.

I like this piece though. It's got a certain desperation to it that tugs at something in my soul. A familiar cry I've echoed at night when I'm all alone with no one to speak to, to hold...perhaps. Or maybe it was when I was surrounded on all sides by those I know but who don't know me...

Excellent piece. It has many interpretations.

-Caradoc

[Mia]

*happy dance*
You get what I was trying to say! Yay! You have no idea how happy that makes me. It's difficult to explain it if people haven't experience.
I'd rather be alone than surrounded by people who don't know me...not that it's their fault, if I don't show you who I am, they'll never know. Easier said than done, showing people who you are. I'm irritable too and short tempered. They probably wouldn't like what they saw.
Terrible to be around, I don't believe that...maybe sometime but no all the time. Thank you Caradoc for reading this and for getting where I was coming from. Beauty is in the eye of the beholder, clichéd but true...so the many interpretations are understandable and I enjoy seeing how different people see the same thing differently.

[Caradoc]

You're most welcome. Art is one of the best windows into the human experience there is, just short of going through it yourself. That's why I think all art is worth something, even if you sometimes have to fall back on cliches.

[Mark]

I usually have a reason for those kind of feelings, if they last. I've had a dream where I would wake up in a panic, but then realize it was only a dream.

[Mia]

It's weird and difficult to explain but it wasn't anything that triggered it...I was just panicked and angry and sad (overly emotionally) and then poof..I was fine

[Mark]

I have a friend who has that issue, has had it most of her life. She was diagnosed as being manic/depressive. If it keeps happening you might want to get checked out!

[Belinda]

Why won’t you stop the raindrops?

As they fall from my face

I love those lines. They were hauntingly beautiful. =) You have great poetry. I wish my poetry could express just half of the feeling that yours does.

[Mia]

Thank you Belinda! Such kinds words and I will treasure them! You're being modest...you're a great writer!

[Belinda]

I'm good at writing books. novels. I like getting into a character. But, poetry. Expressing my own emotions instead of a characters? its hard. Its hard to let yourself be raw and honest. Its easy to make something up.

[Mia]

I can understand that, sharing is not always easy.

[John Phoenix Hutchinson..]

wow great piece this it really shouts loud at you and I dont mean because of the large font. Well done.

[Mia]

LOL...the really large font sums up how I felt. Thank you John :)

[Matty Bosox]

Mia...This is one of the most beautiful writes I have ever read...This literally sent chills and I practically lost my breath though half of it...You speak of the lord and I think you were writing with God's hand when you wrote this...It is hard and oh so rare to find something so powerful and emotionally charged...Like Poe, Whittman, and Dylan Thomas this is the furthest down the road of words one can travel...After writing this you should consider a job as a professional scripter or song writer...Excellent stuff Mia :o)

[Mia]

Matty...wow! I'm at a loss of words. I can't tell you how much this means to me. I'm humbled. I think you have been far to kind with your compliments but I will gladly expect them :) Thank you so much…a thousand times, thank you!

[Matty Bosox]

The pleasure is all mine Mia...Don't be humbled, be proud to have such talent with words.