Prologue

An introduction to the story, what is going in Mia's life.

My life was perfect until... I don't know. I mean I had everything that a girl needs in her life. Everything that I needed and everything that I didn't need. A perfect life, family, friends... boyfriend. He is a nice guy. Very nice in fact. He cared about me no matter what. Even though I told him there is no need.

Mum found out about him. She was furious on learning that I have been dating a guy secretly. I can't remember for how long. When she found out, I broke up with him. It broke my heart. It felt like my heart has been ripped out and torn into pieces. It hurt.

Before that my life took first turn. A turn that changed my life forever. It hurt more than my heart being ripped. It felt like a part of my soul has been taken away from me. It was my Dad who was taken away. Away from me and my family. In November 2010, he got murdered. Without any mercy, they killed him. They killed him and made us half paralyzed. It was so cruel. Almost like life taking.

It happened in our shop which was built beneath our house. Dad was closing down the shop when some teenagers came and asked for alcohol. My Dad refused because two reasons: 1) they were under 18 of age and it's illegal to sell alcohol to people under 18 and 2) the shop was closed. The teenagers threatened him but he still refused. When the threat went in waste, they attacked and killed him. They stabbed my Dad to death. It hurts you know. NO! It kills you when a member of your family is taken away. It damages you for life.

I abhor those teenagers. I won't forgive them; not in this life, not in next life. Now they are rotting in jail. God knows for how long they will. But I pray that they rot there for their whole life. They canker their until last day of their lives. They decay their until death is upon their heads.

I am originally from France. And now I live in UK. My life was a 'living dream' until everything, that I mentioned, happened. Nothing is perfect happen now. It's like my life, my world has been turned upside down. I've lost my Dad, the nicest boyfriend ever and a smile that used to lit up my face; or so the two special people said to me.

My Mum totally disliked my boyfriend, Ulusean. A unique name; I loved it.

One day I was talking to him on the phone when my Mum caught me. I was in deep trouble and I knew that. No-one could take me out from abyss of that trouble. She shouted at me until she was crying. She bawled and cursed me, "You are spoiling everyone's life. Everyone; family and non-family.", she said to me.

I didn't talk back, though. I knew talking back would only make things worse. And how could I even talk back? I never did it in my whole life. To anyone of my elders, at least. My Mum was planning to send me to Canada to live with me uncle and his family.

After crying and yelling at me, she said to me that, "Talking on the phone with friends is fine but talking on the phone and then hiding it is lying."

Later that day, she called Ryan uncle. A family friend. Although, he wasn't our real uncle, we still treated him like one. He has been always there for us. In our good and bad times; easy and hard situations.

After she was done calling, she told me, "Your Dad died not even two months ago and you've already started a problem in the house". Her voice was calm but full of anger.

This was an introduction of my life.

My name is Mia and this is my life story.

Author's Note

Would love some reviews as this is my first book I am working on...
Criticize if you want! :)
Thanks ^^

Reviews

[Sakshi]

Sorry for looking upon your "read request" so late. was little occupied myself. so, accept my apologies.
This is a crisp prologue. Enough shown-Enough hidden. Some lines and phrases are redundant though. And what you can do for more readership is use "bold" and "italics" at some place while you're writing and preview it before saving. That way you can space out easily. Because otherwise this looks very dull.

Also I would like to add - The issues in Mia's life are very common. Many movies are made on it and many stories have the same plot, so I hope your story and book stands out.

All the best!

[Horizon K.]

Interesting. There's a lot of grammatical errors but on to the story. I think there is a lot going on. Definitely there are 3 major problems you bring up right away, the boyfriend, dad, and being sent to Canada? I think each issue would have a stronger impact if spaced out so the emotions of each can be more fully explored.

[Castonovia]

Intense and personal to the character, very intrigueing... kind of loved the reiteration because it slightly added more drama to those simplistic words, a touch of feelings... perfect beginning. Well penned write indeed. Can't wait for more!!! ;)

[Methu]

Thanks You :)

[Castonovia]

No problem :p

[luviva]

NICE START... GREAT WRITE EN I CANT WAIT... ITS SAD THOUGH

[Methu]

thats life!!! thkz for the review!:)

[DrD]

Everything depends, of course, Methu, on where you go from here. You have given us a foundation but what readers will really see are the walls and roof of the story. You have created the element of suspense, forcing us to wonder if there will be a reunion with the boyfriend, will you go to Canada, i had to wonder what the mother's call to Ryan was all about and why you called him Ryan uncle instead of Uncle Ryan. A lot of openings to build on but I am intrigued and that's what prologues are supposed to do. A very nice job.

[Methu]

Thank you so much... Actually the phone call with Ryan uncle is a mystery.
I wrote it as Ryan uncle because I intended to. I don't know why but that's what I wanted for it..
Thanks again ^^

[Hester Vane]

A nice start, simple and effective. You give alot of information which helps set up the story. Im wondering if maybe you could hold a bit back to add some tension, unless its vital to the story progression at this point. The narrative voice is strong, keep working on her and she will blossom. Good start.

[Methu]

Thank you ^^

[The Invisible Girl]

This is a very good prologue! Waiting for the next chapter!! :)
100/100

[Methu]

Thanks ^^