Moonbeats

The full moon lights your window tonight,

and you taste it in your throat, feel it surging

around your heart, something all your own,

something to have faith in. 

 

And the moon is a heart: blood-red and pulsing, 

yearning through the night:

 

                                      . . . da-dun . . . da-dun . . . da-dun . . . 

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Reviews

[eglantine]

I am def a fan of the moon, as my own poetry proves. I love the title. I like where you are going with this poem, but I want to actually taste the moon rather than just feel a lump in my throat. You say "you taste it in your throat" but what exactly does that taste like?

I'd delete the ending period in the first stanza.

Thanks for sharing.

[Dennis A. Clark]

Thanks, Eglantine.

What does the moon taste like? Good question.

About the period at the end of the first stanza, it must stay, as it ends that grammatical phrase, and this poem is one in which I am using end punctuation and capitalization (sometimes I do not, depending on the piece).

[Girl Friday (Sarah W.)]

The moon is quite an intoxicating element in the world. I find myself staring out at the moon quite often, especially on a clear night, over the ocean; it's a breathtaking and almost impairing thing--like a child looking up at something that seems larger than life and wondering...

With such a short piece, you've conveyed much emotion, and I commend you on that. My writes tend to be lengthier than I like most of the time. I also agree that the period at the end of the first stanza could be lost, but I quite like the colon at the end of the second stanza. Well written--I'm glad I happened upon your work.

[Lexi Nicole]

Oh my goodness, this is absolutely perfect! This poem is stunning, absolutely gorgeous writing, perfect language, beautifully depicted. It's wonderful. Lovely work!

[MandaBear]

The more and more I read your poems the more and more I become a fan! Great stuff!

[Alissa]

I am also a fan and admirer of the moon. What you have here is a sensual and wonderful. I absolutely love your writing.

[KAOlmsted]

Love the full moon...I cannot recall if I ever wrote about it, though...nice job with this.

[Joshua Lean]

I enjoyed reading this. Perfectly conveyed.

[Richard Man]

I get the beat. I love the moon, the great symbol of the anima, femininity and of life.

[Robbie~xoxo~]

THIS is exactly how a full moon makes me feel!!!...like something magical is taking place. Beautifully conveyed!

[Jack...]

Tonight is the full moon where I live...thank you for the preview