she wonders why i choose poetry

but who with words like stones

can explain those strange reflections,

layered ghosts on glass,

of some run-down desert motel we pass,

its neon sign sputtering

against the flitting of locusts

rising before a sun

set by now miles from here,

replaced with the new moon

and two strangers who,

walking barefoot down the beach,

reach for each other and grab tight,

forgetting, as high tide masks

their traces, the questions

they've been longing

to ask?

For the "Short Poetry Contest."

Reviews

[Studio Dongo]

4th line evokes Prufrock for me. Not sure if it's supposed to, but I like it for doing that. And I like the buried, embedded cadences being washed over by the high tide and smoothed out as we reach the end of the (dare I say it?) OVERWHELMING question.

[Richard Man]

Great poem on many levels. I agree Eliot-like, the evocation of a history, of a past and a future washed away by the tide of now.

[conversations with her ..]

bold and beautiful...

one of my fav poems on here now

[Everett DeValle]

Magnificent poetry...wow, I'm in awe of artful and emotive words that move me. Awesome. :)

[Margarette]

I can imagine the situation already and with your nice flow of words and a consistent back-up of the imagery, this piece is certainly a catch. Thanks for sharing!

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Beautiful imagery. Reminds me of an awkward boy, afraid to make a move. This free spirits says go for it! :)

[Joshua Lean]

Splendid write.Imagery grabs you and doesn't let go.

[MandaBear]

I really liked this very much! I hope this will win the short poetry contest. It is awesome.

[KAOlmsted]

The imagery is astounding. Well done.

[Be myself!]

I like this. It's simple and short, yet if you read between the lines its long. :) I give you an A+

[Jack...]

Stunning, simply stunning. I felt at ease reading this piece

[Adam Whitworth]

i like it, well done