yellow plums

walt whitman lies long

in marigolds, savoring

yellow plums: sour-sweet

For the "Can You Haiku?" contest.

Reviews

[Richard Man]

Give Me The Splendid, Silent Sun, Give me a Whitman poem whilst he in marigolds does..... the washing up .....and let me savour the last of his yellow plums and other juicy autumnal fruit, ripe and red from the orchard.
Thanks for this poem it sent me back to read some WW again.

[Dennis A. Clark]

Love that response!

[Verser]

You can Haiku, for sure. This fills the requiremrnts of the form while at the same time engaging the reader with sensory delight. Alliteration, and lovely sounds, too.

[Jack...]

This is nice and calm, serenely written and colorful. Good luck in the contest.

[esperanza]

This is great

[Argilus]

This is beautiful!

[MandaBear]

This is great. Very simple and to the point I like that. Beautiful.

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I'd say this was a great haiku-senryu hybrid.

[Dennis A. Clark]

"Haiku!"

"Pardon?"

"Senryu!"

"Bless you."

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Yeah... Marigolds and plums only fruit and flower at a certain time of year - allusions inherent to haiku. : )

[Dennis A. Clark]

I should have said "Gazoontite."

Thanks for your comments.

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Yes. I understand german better than Hmong : )

[Dennis A. Clark]

Mung among the Hmong...

I'm thinking of another fiver.

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Lol,..that's good : )