You and I

I am not I in a poem.

You are the you of my mind.

We are engaged in this reading,

Lovers of lyrical lines.

Syllables chosen for rhythm;

Vowels sounded out for the rhyme.

Images carefully crafted

Lead you to laugh or to cry.

Poems present what we're feeling,

Who are the we, you and I?

Words are what hold us together.

Is, then, our union a lie?

 

Reviews

[Be myself!]

Well...this is very good. You ended with a question that is more of an opinion, I believe that you can meet friends by just the very ink that you write with be it liquid or pixels. I are more likely to show yourseslf in writing than in person because you can be yourself. Hopefully, no one will judge you by your writing but by your actions. The knowledge of literature itself is a friend to any human. It teachs us even if we don't wish to learn. So the answer to your question, in my opinion, is no, it is not a lie but a florishing bud wanting to grow into a beautiful rose.

[Dennis A. Clark]

Ah, very nice response. Thanks, Lexi.

[Be myself!]

Haha. Yay. Lol. And your welcome. :)

[Dennis A. Clark]

I chose a good name, didn't I?

[Be myself!]

Yep. Thats my favorite. Other than the fact that it is also a pornstars name.

[Dennis A. Clark]

Just looked it up. Ah, okay.

[Be myself!]

Yea. Kinda of a disappointment.

[Sky]

Words do hold us together, we are connected in poetry. Literature in the mind of the writer transcends to the reader in a special way. Well done.

[Dennis A. Clark]

I love that idea of transcending and transferring in a special way.

[Chris]

Not quite as "light" as it appears at a glance.

[Dennis A. Clark]

Thanks, Chris. I agree.

[Margarette]

This is the first time I've read this kind of poem, more like the playful use of words entangled in a web of metonymy. I enjoyed reading it and I hope that you'll make more of this. Thank you for sharing!

[Dennis A. Clark]

Interesting. Thanks, Margarette.

I often confuse metonymy with synechdoche.

[Dennis A. Clark]

Synecdoche, that is.

The film "Synecdoche, New York" is a good reminder, though.

[Margarette]

You're welcome! I think I'm going to watch that film.

[KAOlmsted]

Very clever, Mr. Clark. Very clever indeed ;-)

[Dennis A. Clark]

Glad you enjoyed it.

[AYVID N]

No, its not a lie because as writers we relate to each other with our innermost thoughts. That's another matter that we embellish them with pretty, attractive words. But somewhere those thoughts that we share are really a true reflection of our emotional state and the state of our mind. A writer cannot be but transparent.

A very neatly and very elegantly written poem that made me stop and think. Divya

[Dennis A. Clark]

Thanks for your input, Divya.

[AYVID N]

You are welcome! :)

[Jack...]

A complete story in three verses, very nicely done.

[Dennis A. Clark]

Thanks, Jack.

I had a fourth stanza in there, but it's lying on the editing-room floor.

[Alisa Js]

Aloha,

Anything beyond the -present- as in -right now- is an illusion for all we have is this moment...

Thanks for sharing,

Alisa ;-)

[Dennis A. Clark]

Ooh, philosophy! I like it.

[Alisa Js]

;-)

[Alissa]

Very clever. A joy to read :)

[Dennis A. Clark]

Thanks for that.

[Richard Man]

No! No lies. A greatly worded and well constructed but simple piece offering. (Pun intended!)

[Dennis A. Clark]

Thanks. I like the pun.