further and further from home

the sun shines hot and flat

while we drive through 

an empty town

with squat buildings

and traffic lights on wires

like black-eyed guardians

the crows look down on us

and laugh their horrible laughs

as we move further and further from home

Reviews

[AYVID N]

This took me straight to those ghost towns we sometimes see in Hollywood horror movies. Very eerie.

[Dennis A. Clark]

I can see that, yes. Crows do seem to conspire, don't they?

[AYVID N]

Yes. Those were the lines that took me to the horror town in the first place. Crows...very symbolic of morbid and bizarre!

[Holly O'Brien]

interesting.....although it was very simplistic I could picture the scene very clearly. I interpret this poem as saying...."I'm leaving home and there is nothing to keep me from not wanting to leave." :)

[Dennis A. Clark]

I like your interpretation, Holly.

[Jack...]

Dennis, this seems like the beggining of something much more. I am left wanting to know what happens next. Very nice, but...what happens???

[Dennis A. Clark]

I like your take-away.

I'm starting with flash poems here: morsels.