Cruel Words.

 

Cold stares and heartless words,

Her heart has broken into thirds

She smiles to keep the truth inside,

Stuck with family who struggles to provide

Trying to live up to enemy expectations,

Struggling to keep in the temptations.

 

Forever stuck in a high tide

She continually fell and forever cried,

Wishing things will subside

But those words are for them to reside

And this pain is worldwide.

 

They don't know her name

Miss the dreams of fame

They never gave her a chance

Judged her at first glance

And she envies that girl

Who's apparently so perfect

It's a thought she cannot neglect.

 

All day she wishes to cut

Forget the words and that perfect s**t

It's an escape from the pain deep inside

Wishing that everything would subside

She watches her wrists pour crimson red

Forever wishing she was dead.

 

The next day she disappeared

Everyone at school only sneered,

Not realising the pain they caused

But for her, time had paused

She fled, forgetting how to tread

Her wings high and proud

As she flew above the crowd

Remembering the pain that was so defined

Laughing, she left this world behind.

 

 

MetBySunlight.

Reviews

[Chris]

You told a good story. It has clarity, completeness, almost like reading a newpaper article. I, as well as others, readily understood what you said. Did I 'feel' it - no. Understand it - yes because it isn't an uncommon story or theme, but actually FEEL the girl's hurt and frustration and desperation and motivation and other -tions? No. Drawing your listeners isn't easy. How I or anyone else might express our thoughts isn't necessarily YOUR way nor even the best way, but like you each of us tries as best we can EACH time we put pen to page. We find what works best for ourselves.

Take Care,
Chris

[Jack Isaac]

It's too bad she had to die in order to spite that "perfect s**t" --she could have gone on to do much better than her. Yet she did go away laughing and that's very important --a happy ending of sorts. I really liked the layout and metering of this poem, it flowed nicely despite that certain sense of anger which usually stalls poetry --so extremely well done for that reason alone. I really liked the way you communicated all that led up to "Wishing things will subside" --really good expressions here!

[Shadow in the Dark]

Wow. I can relate to the first paragraph alot. It was very powerful and really got in your face towards the end. Just to let you know if i was in your school and you didn't show i'd be going WTF? all day and then i would probably go beat up all the a******s who made you cut yourself.

[paradise]

its good

[Thea]

Wonderfully written...
"All day she wishes to cut
Forget the words and that perfect s**t
It's an escape from the pain deep inside
Wishing that everything would subside
She watches her wrists pour crimson red
Forever wishing she was dead."
This is such an intense write...Great emotion you put in here...Keep writing! :)))

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WOW! So powerful and ever so sad, So nicely written. Loved the flow and rhyme scheme, so nicely written. You are very talented.