A rocks life

just a small poem I wrote a few years back at college, can't remember much of the story behind it just that it's one of my favourite works

lying there on the ground, I see a light rise up high, 
above the roof of the house, comes the sun that brings all life, 
its beams fall down upon the ground, and bathe me 'til the end of day, 
this pavement is where I sit, every night and and every day, 

until this day I have not moved, but up I rise in a large pink hand, 
I feel myself travel back, as he decides to hurl at cans 
a smash and bang, I hit them hard, those can fall down with a preaching sound 
I feel myself continue down, bounce of that can then hit the ground, 

new friends I've found but nothings changed 
I'm still round and without pain 
I sit here bathed with scorching sun 
my life is boring, grey and dull 

Author's Note

an old work, my style has changed since & I is not the final version (i couldn't find that one)

Reviews

[Beau Maysey]

Ooh, this poem is nice and visual- I got a clear image out of almost every line, and I like it! Not necessarily trying to rhyme too much here I imagine, and not a lot of form, but I have warmed to some of the more raw poems that I see. Some lines you could clean up if you want to make this poem better, but I get the feeling you've gone on to do bigger and better works already, so for what you have here it's pretty good! :3

[Sami Khalil]

A splendid old work of yours...Bravo......................

[Stephen Elliott]

glad you liked it

[Sami Khalil]

^^~^^ :)......................

[magenta24uk]

I like the story to it but felt it could ellude to life in general. Tossed by an unknown hand, numb, finding ones self in new surroundings but still alone. Maybe we are all rocks?

[Stephen Elliott]

thank you so much. many people have said how they feel this poem is a metaphor for life, I never had such intentions when writing it, however I've always believed the meaning behind any art (I consider writing to be an art form) is the meaning you see.

[magenta24uk]

I agree and think writing is one of the greatest art forms. I do love to find a hidden meaning. :)read moreI agree and think writing is one of the greatest art forms. I do love to find a hidden meaning. :)

[Rose Diamond]

I really like how you are able to take something so simple, something we see everyday, and give it life. I have lots of respect for writers who can do that!

(P.S. I love your icon, Fairy Tale is the best thing ever! :P)

[Stephen Elliott]

thank you so much, the whole intention of the poem was to bring life to something inanimate.

(p.s. thank you, one of my favourite animes and I heard Mashiro has approved more episodes)