Graceful Fall

A poem about love and the inevitable path to its demise.

It’s bittersweet, falling in love,

Going 90 on a one way street,

Dead-ending in 20 feet,

A single-sided sweet dream before the sickening nightmare wakes me…

 

The light that I see is darkening with the pain,

My heart is tumbling, trying to break free from its cage,

From the stronghold keeping it hostage from feeling,
I’m engulfed in a dark, frightening place….

 

This deafening silence drives me over the edge,

I’m in love with the way you hurt me,

Because you could never love me,

Could never feel for me like I feel for you,

Smitten…

 

Love, an emotion deadlier than sin,

These words, a mistake to mumble from my lips,

The words that kill me with the kiss,
As I release my feelings into the air,

This nightmarish fairytale bliss,

Broken by the nonbeliever in reality,
That love doesn’t exist.

 

This daydream took me to heights that leave me shaking,

I’m trembling from fear that falling,

Will break my emotions rather than my body,

A much more frightening realization,

That love exists, but not between us,

It’s nonexistence, within my fears...

 

You left me here to feel,

While you checked your heart at coat check…

 

You stepped back before I had a chance,

I saw too late with regret,

That I let my heart ignore my brain,

Whispering to save me from the pain,

I now hate the feeling that I used to love,

I hate that this love isn’t wanted…

 

I want to hate your nonchalance,

Because you never seemed to care when I felt more than you,

You care, just not in the way that I do,

And it pains me to fall for you…

 

I thought the love I had for you would be contagious,

But it seems you were immune,

Vaccinated to avoid feeling what’s left me sickly with heartbreak,

My heart swollen,

Beaten and bruised for years by men who always gave up on love,

Each of them up to date on their vaccination,

While I fall effortlessly to the ground,
A graceful fall…

Author's Note

I could use advice on how to structure it, how to improve the flow, etc.

Reviews

[Noah E. Furtah III]

Your flow is great. The honesty is real. I have never been sure as to why we keep allowing ourselves to be subjected to the psychological and/ or physical abuse that others inflict onto us. At some point, I believe we're all guilty of it. Personally, it's not the structure that a writer should worry about. It's the flow and the words. If I were your teacher, that would be an A+. Very well done.

[Soyeb]

This really beautiful. It seems from the heart and thats good to have.
There were some words you could change around and make it rhyme more frequently. The lines about being Immune was very well thought :D