VERSE-LESS

upon raging still waters
nothing stirs within
this corporeal blackness

light eludes the vessel
silenced and numb
as the roar of fickle tides
obscures the fragments
of a shattered puzzle
splayed across the sea

amorphous reflections
bring dissolution to
a fading visage
into the depths
of an unversed abyss

Reviews

[Wolf's Dark Song]

This is really good writing It gave me the sense of someone trapped in a deep dark and painful depression.

[L. Edward Neale]

Now that there's some deep outta body trip going on there. Felt transported by that in quite a psychedelic way. Just read it a few times then visualised it. Very dream like. Raging still waters -- feeling of immense power and potential hidden beneath a tranquil sea of possibility.The swell swallowing up the broken pieces of the minds once great empire of rationality. Wow! Absolutely loved that. So compact yet so boundless and viscerally enthralling at the same time. Awesome.

[Melati]

Perfectly written. You are so talented!

[Divinity Sleeps in This]

Wow what a thead of vision you weave, I liked how you elaborated on your subject like layers on a painting. Very aesthetically pleasing!

[J]

whoa. have never been so gifted in locution in relating the frustration of writer's.block. [!!] in your case, i would beg the affliction. even in [perceived] shallows of elusive acuity, you light the sky. ;)

[emmajoy]

You have a way of writing 'dark' in a very gentle almost musical way; your words are kind to the theme, they don't shout or jar. And here you see what can happen '.. as the roar of fickle tides obscures the fragments .. '

[symmetryAsymmetry]

art is redemption...this is art.

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

Simple and perfectly written, it guuides the reader to completion, well done. good read.

[Marie]

Good poem. Reflections on the sea, shattered and obscured...nice imagery.

[Tim Lion]

Wow. I can see a face sinking into the murky water. Badass image.

The entire thing is quite lovely, somewhat haunting.
It speaks.

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