alutron girl

just another alutron girl
hidden away in housewife, usa
i am a cog in this machine
where entropy is happening
and technology makes me
obsolete.

wreckless drivers
in monstrous vehicles
make speed limits
limitless.
i go as fast as them
but it's not fast enough.
i stare at trunks and plates
and wonder how this all fits
in the machine.

the chaos begins.

pills to keep me in my place
pills to keep the blues away
pills to get me through the day
pills to end a long hard day.

i'll try my best
to do my part
to keep the wheels turning
until i say it's over
until i say i'm through;

until then i'll be
just another alutron girl
calibrating
participating
wondering
when.

Reviews

[Omegax45]

Wow. To me, this feels like lyrics to a song. I feel the same way on the highway. I stay at the speed limit, but everyone seems to be faster than me. Great poem.

[Chris Yip]

Excellent poem, I enjoyed reading it. A very good and real subject that you have written about. A life of a housewife in the rat race of today, hoping for some change in her life. Thanks for the good write.

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thats a poignant look at our society today..well written

[Muse]

hidden away in housewife, usa

So you know what this is? lol

The message is strong and severe. It pained me a bit to read it...too many pills are not good sweete...it does not fix the problem...it just makes you oblivious to all the wrong that surround you. Powerful penning.

[Inyourshadow]

The pill stanza I so related to as my days seem this way also, pills for everything from sleep to comatozied days. A well written and delivered poem. Keep em' coming young poetess

[Coyote Poetry]

I like the poem. Such strength and realness in the story. Easy to become part of the furniture. Hard to find what you were. I like how you told this tale. A strong ending to a poem with a reason and a purpose. A outstanding poem.
Coyote

[Kenneth The Poet]

A powerful work, I think. Being lost in the shuffle is demonstrated well here.

[Lily Mae]

It reminds me of a little saying that I take the pills to forget that I'm alive.. There's so much emotion and true attached to this write that I could go on forever... Nice job.. :) xx

[khalid]

very nicely written. i really like it specially the phrase; make speed limits limitless. i really enjoyed it

[Benyoucef]

That's a vivid image up there, anyone can relate to it, very good job