Crush

About a girl I like. A lot.

I know its a little cliche

To write a poem for a girl

But first, just see it my way

Come on, just give it a whirl

I've cared and loved and shared her weight

Made sure her shoulders’ll never unfurl

I became a steadfast presence for her

I became a shoulder on which to cry

Whenever her heart got damaged

Always there to be her closest ally

Always close by with a nice warm bandage

Always there with a reason to stop by

Always ready, one command, i'm Savage

Nothing stopping me from going samurai

She is nothing short of the full Package

Intelligent, funny, beautiful enough to electrify

With a smile, I help carry her Baggage

Always there, with her I will stand by

Author's Note

This is mainly an outlet with this one, give any feedback.

Reviews

[Aesthetic Trash]

Was a pleasure to read. I found the poem to be from the heart. A thing that most people lack. It was a pleasure going over the poem once more.

However, a bit of evaluations I might add, I found the poem to be cramped and slanted. The title was perfect but it shouldn't be in the poem itself. The font seems a bit on the large side. It's mostly appearance that you struck out on.

Other than that, your poem was lovely and I bet that girl will be yours very soon.

[Mercer]

Thank you for noting, and i just copy and paste these from my poems doc, so I must have forgotten to erase the title. Other than that, i agree with the font, and the cramped part. I will be sure to edit it shortly. :)

[Aesthetic Trash]

I almost flipped out, I thought noting said nothing. Anyways, no problem it was a pleasure to read.
:)

[Mercer]

Happy to hear, I would never start anything online. :)

[Amy]

Your poem was very good. You did a great job expressing the love you have for her.

[Mercer]

If only I could express it to her directly...

It is my own doing, don't want to ruin a great friendship.

[Amy]

Well, in that case, I hope one day you tell her how you feel.

[Mercer]

as do I, Thank you :)

[Hanlan Paquin]

This poem was so sweet, I can tell you really like whom ever it is written for. I love the ending, it just seemed to tie the poem up in a nice little perfect bow.

[Mercer]

I Really do, and I appreciate the comment, hopefully someday they can know, or even stumble across this poem.