No I will not write about love

I hate writing love poems 

I'm not sure I know how to 

So I hate to try 

Writing feelings such as those 

I cannot make sense of 

Therefore how can I write them down? 

A confused love poem is what you'll receive 

forced and full of nothing shy of sweet 

And disgustingly so it will be 

I can't write a love poem

Please don't ask me to 

If you want to know how much I care

View my actions that lead us here 

You want confirmation on feelings words cannot fathom

On feelings you cannot understand

That's the point of love don't you get it? 

You're confused the whole time 

You aren't sure why you're doing the things you do 

Why you're always grinning like a fool 

Why everything seems bright and cheerful 

Why when they get near your heart 

Beats faster and you want to see them smile 

All the time and their face 

flashes right behind your eyes. 

The world turns upside down

Inside out and yet everything is fine

So no don't ask me for a love poem. 

Nothing not even rhyme 

Can explain something so complex. 

It's practically a waste of time.

Author's Note

Whether this is prose poetry or just poetry I do not know. It was another text message to my friend who asked me to write a love poem for his girlfriend. This is what I told him he should tell her.

Reviews

[Brittini Ennui]

I enjoyed this. We often get caught up in the extremes of love, the infatuation and/or pain, and try to explain it. Let's just not, lol. Good job.

[Meraki]

:) thank you

[Thaddius]

I really enjoyed this no-nonsense take on love poems. Its kind of trying to be the 'antihero' of love poems. I love that persona. You carry it off well. If you could inject a little more imagery, it could make the passion more visceral, to offset the cynical nature of the poem, and kind of disprove it in an ironic flourish.

You discuss how it is impossible to bottle the feelings that love conjures up, to synthesize and reproduce essentially a drug. The poem functions dually as a self-conscious meditation on writing itself, and as plea of noncommittal or ambivalent love. I can feel your doubt in these lines, and even a pathological fear of feeling love.

I feel you could word it more effectively in some places, but subject wise, this is a strong effort. Enjoyed it

[Meraki]

Oh, thank you

[Ai Lun]

I think I have to disagree with Thaddius about the delivery of the subject. I think that with a poem like this (which is obviously based on personal emotions), the piece is made more effective by it's 'non-textbook' poetic structure.

[Thaddius]

I'm intrigued by this. What do you mean 'non-textbook structure'? Do you mean that the lack of imagery actually serves it? Phrases like 'bright and cheerful' and 'upside down, inside out' are images, but could be stronger in my opinion. So maybe not more, but strengthen the ones already there was what I meant to say. I could be completely off base with what you meant. What did you mean?

[Ai Lun]

I meant that the choice of words (precisely because they may not be the strongest possible way to provide the imagery) may serve the purpose of making this poem stronger, due to the fact that the choice of words seem to be more natural. It seems as though this is a real thought process as opposed to a poem that gains its strength from structure and strict imagery. But I do see where you were coming from, when you wrote your review.

[Thaddius]

I agree with you! You know, this makes me think of how an actor decides to play a character in a movie. There is the over the top, larger than life type portrayal, the Daniel Plainview in there will be blood. Compare that with Joaquin Phoenix' work in Her, or lots of what the late, great PSH (man I miss him) did. They are so understated and honest, unaffected and un-'method-ed-out'. No accents, no characterizations, just them. Daniel Day and Meryl Streep hit the truth gong resoundingly through these larger than life guises. Both types approximate a thought process, but one is idealized and the other perhaps more accessible, more 'everyman'. So I agree that for what this is, he does a good job and needn't strengthen everything. I also think that if he decided to, it could still serve the piece, it doesn't have to be balls to the wall anything. The majority of performances fall somewhere in-between the examples I set, and work on the terms that they themselves define.

I really appreciate your intelligence. Learned something.

[Thaddius]

and may I add that PSH did also do a lot of characterizations and larger than life roles, I merely meant that his 'bread and butter' was this calm very naturalistic way of doing himself

[Ai Lun]

'tis a 'she' that wrote this :P And you're very welcome :)

[Thaddius]

haha lost track of that.

[Antonio Valentino]

well you just wrote one, and a delightful and honest one at that..

love comes in many forms

as does our interpretation of it

lovely job

:)

[Meraki]

Thank you that means a lot :)

[Carmen]

i really enjoyed reading this poem, I also find myself struggling to write poems about love also.

[Meraki]

Thank you, both for reading this and sharing my strife in writing love poems.