Freezing Heat

Shadows 

A world covered in shadows 

Lost in its cloak 

Disappearing into this 

Dark universe

An abyss 

A curse it must bare 

To carry the haunted 

Never is there music 

Or laughter, happiness 

No shining light 

But sorrow, hate 

Anger, spite 

The souls suffer 

Pains unknown 

Unbearable for physical forms 

They cry, they weep 

Beg and plead 

Cold they will stay 

A freezing heat 

To suffer their punishments 

For lives lived in sin.

Author's Note

Did I mention that I love to take criticism.

Reviews

[Tam Warink]

Yes, yet another flame that gives no light (beyond remorse). Did you ever wonder why humanity seems drawn to such thoughts? Perhaps it is just a natural seeking of balance, an equilibrium between them (light and dark, joy and sorrow, etc.) that helps maintain a sort of sanity, a "normal." You've described a brilliantly abstract and eternally desolate fate. Let's hope there's more to it than that. In fact, let's strive to help make it so.

100 shining lights

[Meraki]

Thank you Tam! Your reviews sound kind of like my thoughts before the words start and avalanche from my hand to my pen and onto the paper.

[Meraki]

I wrote it for the irony. A fire that does not burn but instead only freezes. I couldn't help myself.

[Tam Warink]

I think it means your mind is working just fine. Invoking the logical negation (of fire is hot, fire give off light) to fire is cold (and/or give off no light) can be a part of the creative process. Nice job! :)

[Cid]

Review :-
You gotta be believe that I read this write not once, twice or not even thrice a time but too many times again n again to get the concept you paste. Yup, that's nice! That's fascinating!
Because #love is onself a pain, a pain that can never never washed away of #rain but the beauty of your heart, of your soul is what that makes the world #magnificent damn #plain.

("I've heard of mah one friend once that 'Bible says, God forgives us for our sins coz he loves us much without #pinch" n your this write really reminds the words of one of mah friend.")

Rating : 101/100!
Note : I #Adored this write!

[Meraki]

Thank you Cid. Your review means a lot to me.

[Cid]

Once again the pleasure is all mine, I damn adore this write, whenever you grab some time write and write to make the world much #delight n, of course, spreading the light making the world bright with all of yours prettiest damn coldest soul every-time...coz, angels always starring as the stars over the sky!

Keep twinkling!

[Meraki]

Thanks! I'll keep that in mind :)

[Cid]

Ha! Nice to heart!
Keep twinkling and making this world bright! After all, angels always make the world bright with their pure white beauty that pretty truty fruity, so keep on my dearest prettiest "twitty!"
Ha!

[TL Boehm]

interesting premise. there is a sad eloquence to this. You've tapped in to the hopelessness of the situation with simple yet powerful words and phrases. Well done.

[Meraki]

Oh thank you. You're so kind.