Daughter's of Danger #1
A Book by Mekaela Konz
 Hanna ran away a year ago. She felt un-like her family, and now she realizes that she was destined for another future, one that included four other girls, one that included being a criminal.  © 2015 Mekaela Konz
Author's Note
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This was written very quickly, and it is un-edited and not revised. So please critique it as much as you please and tell me what you think.
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it is no wonder Hanna ran away last year. Her family seemed more complete without her.
Posted 9 Years Ago
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9 Years Ago
I like it my only suggestion I make it a harder opening stating a bit fact that made her select a ne.. read moreI like it my only suggestion I make it a harder opening stating a bit fact that made her select a new way of life.
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9 Years Ago
Thank you and I agree that I need a better opening statement. I need to work a lot on the whole stor.. read moreThank you and I agree that I need a better opening statement. I need to work a lot on the whole story altogether and edit it to perfection.
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9 Years Ago
no not better, it is good as is. Bolder! Is she bitter, is she shedding her past fears for a new im.. read moreno not better, it is good as is. Bolder! Is she bitter, is she shedding her past fears for a new image that can't be hurt. If you can hook the reader with the 5w's you will hold there attention.
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Author
Mekaela KonzTaos, NM
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Hello! My name is Mekaela Konz and I'm thirteen years old. I've been writing now for five years, because it is now my passion in life. I'm a vegetarian, love cats, and live in an earthship. more..
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