I Want Some Honesty (Edited)

just read.

I want to hear the honest truth,

I don't care if it hurts.

I don't care if I will regret it

but I want to know now before I change my mind.

 

You've lied and I've cried.

I've tried but you untied.

I want some honesty

not f*****g dishonesty.

 

I tell you the truth all the time,

can't you give into your invisible guilt just this once?

You burn me in the face every moment of every day,

can't you give me a break before I run away?

 

I want the opposite of dishonesty,

you heard me,

I want some f*****g honesty for once in my life

Before I unknowingly die.

 

I cannot sleep because you've made me an insomniac teen.

I want to know why your heart is so hurtful,

I cannot trust because you have been so mean,

I can only be paranoid because you've given me reasons to be frightful.

 

You've lied and I've cried.

I've tried but you untied.

I want some honesty

not f*****g dishonesty.

 

I want the opposite of dishonesty,

You heard me,

I want some f*****g honesty for once in my life

Before I give in and I damnedly die.

 

All I want is for somebody to be honest,

Not for you to play my life like a pianist.

You're always dishonest,

Why can't you just be honest?

 

 

 

Author's Note

Uhhhh.....I just reminded myself of first grade?

Reviews

[ewest1220]

Interesting. Quite the rant. I think the F-Bomb may have been overused. Try to use it once toward the end. That'll emphasize it and add importance to the word. The thing with swearing is it has to be timed just right to add that shock. I like the (no pun intended) brutal honesty of this poem. Well done!

[Melody]

Thanks. :) I didn't really know what other word to use for it to be what I wanted it to be. Lol. Although there was one time I went back and that's when I used damn... Lol

[Falling Leaf.]

So straightforward and...well...honest :) Only two whoopsies, that I can tell. First, end of third stanza. *Run away. Also, beginning of sixth stanza. *And. Other than that, well done!

[Melody]

Thanks. I just went back to correct it. :)

[Harley (arbiter)]

Oh Hey I can relate to this. It's better to be honest then to lead someone on. Awesome! Ya kinda overdid the f word though. I don't mind it there but I think ya went overboard

[Melody]

I tend to do that a lot. Lol. I have lots of frustration. XP gotta let it out somehow. I thought it fit it better like that though, just because of who I am. And I don't like having perfect poems.

[Harley (arbiter)]

Perfection is a lie of a wise man. Perfection is impossible

[Melody]

That's true. Fine than what is humanly closest to perfection, I prefer to stay away from it. Lol

[Melody]

then*

[Owlgirl]

Perfection.... I agree with you both. Once one is truly perfect and there's nothing left to make a mistake with and it learn, well that's not living, they are already dead.

[Harley (arbiter)]

Woah. Outta nowhere! Lol and I disagree. One can't ever get perfection.

[Melody]

That's deep Owlgirl...O.O
I guess it's opinionated. Perfection is discribed as many things.

[Melody]

described* UGH I keep making typos!

[Harley (arbiter)]

Perfection is a complete lie. In my opinion. Yes Everyone has their own. I respect everyone's but I will side with mine. : J

[Melody]

Lol. That's good. :)

[Kimberly "Melody" Carne..]

sounds like my ex...I like the poem the words sound like you could tweak them abit and turn it into slam poety. Nice

[Melody]

Thanks. I'm probably going to sound like an idiot, but what's slam poetry?

[Kimberly "Melody" Carney]

Poetry slam is the competitive art of performance poetry. You do not just read your poetry, you talk it, scream it infuse it with power and passion. It is mostly spoken with a rhythm of your chosen intensity. This is done live at a microphone and is an amazing experience.

[Kimberly "Melody" Carney]

Alot of pepole don't know what it is, it is just one of the over40 diffrent kinds of poetry out there.

[Melody]

OH! Now I know what you're talking about. If I was actually allowed to cuss I would so get my mom to take me to one, but looks like I'm waiting 'til I turn 16. Lol. I listen to some spoken word, and I've been told to go to slam poetry before because of how raw my poetry is, but I don't know...I don't think I have the guts, it's not like theatre where you're somebody else, but yourself. Lol

[Kimberly "Melody" Carney]

That what makes it amazing, you face your fears and free flow the raw side of you. It is healing and well addictive. I myself do not do it, as I write a very different style. Maybe your mom could take you there to watch? Even if not by time your 16 you will kick a*s with the skills you will have obtained by then. Keep writing and always syat raw and true to YOU. Night.

[Kimberly "Melody" Carney]

Sorry for all the typo's This is me after working 22hour in a row at the hospital.

[Melody]

I will. Thanks. Goodnight Melody. :)

[Melody]

It's okay. You better get some rest if you're working hours like that. Lol.

[Kimberly "Melody" Carney]

I will, good night Melody:)