No.

A new poem.

You told me that you would be there for me, were you?

No.

You told me that if I went blind then you would be the one to lead me, were you?

No

You told me that if I cried that you would slap me,did you?

Yes.

You told me that if I died for you that you would continue to live happily, did you?

Yes.

You told me that all things are meant to be,

You told me that if one door closes then you would just open it again,

You told me ..

"Yes, I love you with all my heart."

 

You told me that you would be loyal, and I that I should trust you.

You told me that we are soulmates and that meant I was supposed to be in chains to serve your sorry a*s.

You told me to never leave the house because you would bring the wedding papers to me.

You told me that we could have that sweet apple red 2010 Camaro with white racing stripes down the middle.

You told me that we could have my dream penthouse and your dream pool.

You told me that you would sell all of your porn magazines.

 

Wanna know what I told you?

No.

 

I told you, when you finally let your guard down,

That I didn't want for you to be there for me,

I didn't want you to be the one leading me when I went blind.

I didn't want you to be the one to slap me to get me to stop crying.

I didn't want you to continue living happily when I died, I told you I wanted to be the one living happily when you died.

I didn't want all things to be inevitable.

I didn't want you to be the one opening up the same door over and over again, I wanted that to be me, just with a different door.

I told you,

"No, don't say that, I want you to hate me."

 

I didn't want you to be loyal, I knew I would never trust you.

I didn't want us to be soulmates so I can be the one that you had sex with in the basement after poker nights.

 

I wanted to leave the house and runaway not have a permanent pigment change on my finger where your rusty ring was.

I wanted to drive that car by myself, but now that you got it and sat your a*s in it, I don't want another Camaro.

I wanted that penthouse to be mine, not ours, I'm afraid of water, why would I want a pool?

I wanted you to keep those porn magazines so I could runaway and tell the police about what you've done to those poor models.

 

Every time...

I should have told you

 

 

 

No...

 

But every time...

A yes was what formed....

 

No..

Not anymore...

 

No.

Author's Note

This is fictional. I promise. I just wish I knew where it came from...

Reviews

[Shadow Kat]

Wow, very nice. Inspiration comes from everywhere! Everywhere!! :D But excelent poem! :)

[Melody]

Thank you! >.

[ewest1220]

Very strong words. At first I thought it was a rant but I really like where it ended up. Nice job!

[Melody]

Thanks. I'll send you some read requests soon, I promise, just got to edit something. :)

[Michael X]

natural creativity flows into each word, with a specific emotional feeling of
an overshadowing sadness, the art of the melancholy, excellent job.

[Melody]

Thank you! :) I particularly like this piece myself.

[Harley (arbiter)]

The only thing I don't like is where you said you don't want another camaro. Cmon. Oh another thing is it sounds Nice but a 69's better. Lol. Great write!

[Melody]

XD Yeah, that whole not wanting a camaro....I would so get another camaro. Camaros are hot, it doesn't matter what year and body style. Lol

[Melody]

Thanks was implied.

[Harley (arbiter)]

Yeah camaros are Awesome. Only thing is the dash shakes. But Eh. And the new ones are cool but I'd rather have a 69 yenko. I'd really rather have (which I do!) A 79 trans-am. But Great write!

[Melody]

Lol. Thanks. And enjoy that 79 trans-am!

[Harley (arbiter)]

Oh I will! ... that kinda sounded wrong..... but anyways Thanks.

[Melody]

HAHAHA!

[Shauna Jacqueline Ander..]

Honestly, in certain parts you can tell you haven't suffered in this way, just some of the phrasing is a bit...overexplanatory? Just it's obviously different to describe something you've been through to something you haven't. Saying that, it's still a very powerful piece, and the fact that you've manage to capture the life and emotion suggests you have an empathy for people. I look forward to reading more. Well done. =]

[Melody]

Thanks. I can honestly say, (get it, honestly? AHAHA! Nah..I'm bad with jokes) that I have, but I haven't in awhile so the feeling has sort of faded. Thanks, I wanted to make it powerful, just didn't know how powerful it would be. I care a lot about people, so I'm glad you caught on to that.
Thank you, I hope you do choose to read more of my work. :)

[Shauna Jacqueline Anderson]

I most certainly will, I'm ever more impressed considering your age...You captured something I didn't thing a fourteen year old could. Thankyou for renewing my faith in the literary youth =]. Take care.

[Shauna Jacqueline Anderson]

think*

[Falling Leaf.]

Exquisite! Though it is fictional, it is excellent! Bravo!

[Melody]

Thanks! XD

[Owlgirl]

Wow! This one was powerful, and inspiration truly comes from anywhere, I often wonder. . . Anyhow, that was excellent writing!

[Melody]

Thanks. XD

[deepblue04]

Ha! inspiration comes from EVERYWHERE! SO DOES IMAGINATION!!! I had to deal with so much of this, it's ridiculous!!!

[Melody]

Lol.I think saying Imagination comes from everywhere is an understatement. Lol

[deepblue04]

not really i experience it everyday for my writing

[Melody]

I suddenly miss those days of constant writing.

[deepblue04]

i know but it everywhere, sometimes you have to look at the not so obvious things

[Melody]

I guess you are right.

[nigrum homonculus]

this look like it came straight out the oven. did you write it off a burst of inspiration? its very good though. i do love the words an imagery and metaphors you use. well done.

[Melody]

Yeah...I was sort of thinking about all of my ex boyfriends...Lol. Thanks. :)

[nigrum homonculus]

haha i see. an no problem