Black Ink Pens and Scribbles

Something I wrote a LONG LONG time ago...Can't remember when...Tell me what you think. :)

I sit and I scribble,
With black ink pens,
Black ink pens and scribbles,
I scribble and I ribble my single given life away.
And when I shower,
I wash the ink off my hands,
and clean the deepest paper cuts down to the ends.
It stings and it rings,
But so do my pulsing fingers
And beating heart.


She sits at a desk
with black ink pens and scribbles.
Black ink pens and scribbles.
She scribbles and ribbles her single given life away.
And when she showers,
She washes the ink off her hands,
And cleans the deepest paper cuts down to the ends.
She stings and she rings,
But so do my pulsing fingers
And beating heart.


I sit and I scribble,
With black ink pens,
Black ink pens and scribbles,
I scribble and I ribble my single given life away.
And when I shower,
I was the ink off my hands,
And clean the deepest paper cuts down to the ends.
It stings and it rings,
But so do my pulsing fingers
And beating heart.


I die with this pen in my hand,
And my book of scribbles below my head.
She dies with her pen in her hand,
And her book of scribbles below her head.
I die with this pen in my hand,
And my book of scribbles below my head.

Author's Note

I wrote this awhile back, if I could give you an exact date- I would ...But I can't...
Thinking about going back to give it an actual edit.
Tell me what you think of it now and point out all of the flaws. Thank you.

Reviews

[deepblue04]

This is amazing! Good job!

[Melody]

Thank you. :)

[Rhea752]

that is so freaky cause i was listening to Not at Home while i read this and it definitely accentuated the poem. well done!! I was imagining this as a movie scene. :)

[Melody]

Lol.
Thank you, and yeah? That would be an interesting movie scene.

[Madeline]

I started putting it into song ^_^ you have an amazing ability for writing, keep it up! :D

[Melody]

:D Thank you Snowbunny! :D You just made my day! :) I'm glad you liked it, and I do indeed plan on to keep writing.

[Madeline]

You are very welcome! Good, I'll be expecting more wonderful pieces :)

[Shadow Kat]

One word: Awesome! The switching of POV made it more mysteriouse and personal :) love it.

[Melody]

Thank you. :)

[Irvette Dauphine]

like this.. i can singing it :)
great job..

[Melody]

Lol. Thank you, Irvette. :)

[Gretchen Clarke]

This was AMAZING!! It's kind of sad, though, what with the person dying. At least they died with their scribbles.
Other than that, it's amazing. It sort of gives off a writer's block-esque vibe. I also got the sense that it was from a piece of writing's POV, but the author gave up on the piece and got rid of it.
Keep up the great work, Melody!

[Melody]

:) Every writing leaves is supposed to leave a sense of fulfillment in both the writer and the reader and the piece itself. That's what I believe and I was hoping- now that I think about how I feel about it now- that that's what I was reaching for in this piece, if it wasn't then it is now. :)

I'm glad you liked it, Gretchen. Thank you for reading and telling me what you thought. :)

[Eloha]

This sounds to me like a person who has become writing, and taken on the pen as her sword. I could be wrong?

I find the repetition somewhat has a soothing quality.

[Melody]

:) Yeah, I sort of forgot how the person was or what the person was, it's been awhile and I'm really bad at revisiting my writing after an amount of time.

:) Good!
Thank you, :)