Hurricane

i have no idea when I wrote this! Read and enjoy!

Now that I have thought,

And spoken,

And written,

And cried,

And prayed,

And played,

And performed...

My life is like a hurricane.

I'm being tossed and thrown in the wind.

Broken and split by a building

Cut and bruised all over by shattered windows.

All my bones and organs have shattered to a million pieces,

All my veins and muscles have been blown away.

There I lie dead,

On the ground..

Abused by this....

Hurricane..

Author's Note

Readers and feedback are much appreciated!

Reviews

[Shadow Kat]

Wow, just a few words and I can see shes... different, even dark. :D Nice job with this one. :D

[Melody]

Thank you!

[Fréyjä Helv..]

Whoa... With the few descriptions and imagery, all I could say is that she's pretty messed up bad... I enjoyed the poem. Just shows an excruciating feeling of depression...

[Melody]

Haha. I am very indeed "pretty messed up bad."
Thank you Vittoria, glad you enjoyed it so. :)

[Seanne Tholltree]

great poem thumbs up

[Melody]

Thank you! :)

[ewest1220]

Wow! That is absolutely beautiful great work!

[Melody]

:D Thanks Ethan!! >.

[Rhea752]

GASP!!! i loved it!! it was amazingly amazing!!! :D

[Melody]

Haha! Thank you! XD

[deepblue04]

I like it! Hurricane is such a bold word but is very appropiate. Good job!

[Melody]

Thank you! :) I appreciate it. >.

[Maan]

I like the way how the idea of 'HURRICANE' is being used in this poem. Precise and very accurately expressed. :)

[Melody]

Thank you >.< Lol.

[afra]

wow ..beautiful ...i think it was perfect ...good job

[Melody]

Thank you so much Afra!

[Michael G.]

I think you captured part of the feel of a hurricane. I could see the wind in this, but I failed to hear it. And those big storms have sounds like no other storms.
Perhaps I went the wrong way in my thinking this was about the hurricane itself, though after reading it a third time, it is more about the human condition.
Well written and as far as it goes, well done. The content is good and it flows very well.
Keep writing!

[Melody]

Thank you! :D I'm glad you liked it so much! >.

[Falling Leaf.]

This is lovely, though I relate in such a different way. I was battered by actual hurricanes. This poem shook me to the core. Well done!

[Melody]

WHOA! I'm sorry, I really don't know what to say to that, except that I'm sorry for anything that you lost in the storm...Nature can pull some nasty tricks on us, but I believe in fate even when the worst happens. :)
I'm glad you enjoyed it! :)