I Am an Artist

Something with a little more truth. I didn't focus on rhythm or meter at all. I didn't really want to...

I began as a flutist...

Twiddling fingers on silver intrument...

This is how I became an artist.

But to be honest, I wasnt all that' briliant,

And I'm not being modest.

 

I admit, I had boyfriend after boyfriend,

I don't think they fit the role very well.

None of them were going to be the one that saved me, soulmate, a godsend.

But one of their names has always been the once-rung-still echoing bell...

I admit, he actually sort of stung,

He made me want to scream.

He was the one strengthening one amung.

But then he made me want to wallow in the tasty depths of ice cream.

 

I waited..No...I counted the days,

He never came,

I never got my way.

I guess I was just a simple bored game.

I got over it,

After a awhile, I subtly missed his voice saying "come here, baby."

Eventually something raised my spirits,

but I was introduced to poetry.

 

Now look at me,

standing above all that sad self-pity.

I'm an artist,

I'd think I'm a pretty bold teen,

After all, he got what he deserved, I've finally eaten off my crust.

Now after all this time, I'd say, "hey look here, I don't need a team, I finally learned to get a little mean."

I don't have a want to be rude,

but I'm happy I'm not worried, no, now I'm an artist.

I hate to be a little brute, but sometmes you just gotta be a little crude.

 

I am an artist

I have learned who to trust

and to make art out of dust and old multi-colord rust

 

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I'm quite proud of myself,

I never really thought that I'd make it this far.

I'd never let some one trophy me on his shelf.

I'm pretty damn happy that I my heart wasn't stuffed into a jar.

 

Everyone I know, they were  a little shocked,

I guess they didn't really expect me to stand up and shake you off.

But no Sir, I've got my heart locked and blocked.

I just stood up, shook you off, looked down and scoffed.

 

I am artist.

You did me a favor.

Granted, I'm nowhere near the smartest,

but you made me braver, not a caver.

 

I am an artist,

I have learned who to trust

and make art out of dust and old-multi-colored rust.

Author's Note

:) I don't want any comments on the rhythm and meter. I really don't. I know that it' bad, the rhythm and meter. Lol.

Reviews

[Dr. Wood ?]

I can only agree with Michael and sy that you really need to stop forcing the rhymes...They do not matter as long as the verse flows...This was still pretty damn good though. I think you need to put the word 'ONE' in where you say...going to be the that saved me....and should it be 'tasty DEPTHS OF ice cream? Sorry if I seem picky...only trying to help

[Melody]

Oh no, you're quite right. The only reason I'm focusing on rhyming is so I can get my rhyming more developed. I'm not very good at rhyming, so I thought I'd work on it. Rhyming is the one thing that..well..just doesn't really work well for me. Lol.
Ahh...So those were the errors...Lol. I looked over it and over it and couldn't figure it out. Now that you've said which, I see where they are. Lol.
You're not being picky at all, thank you very much Dr.Wood.

[words of rooted design]

"I am an artist,
I have learned who to trust
and make art out of dust and old-multi-colored rust."

Fantastically written.

The last four stanzas make me proud of you as a woman and as the amazing artist this proves you to be. Wonderful work darling.

[Melody]

>.< Thank you! :)

[Shadow Kat]

Oh I love it! Its beautiful, how the artist began. :) And I agree the rhymes dont matter. :D Its a great poem.

[Melody]

Thanks. :D

[Owlgirl]

Wow! This is excellent! I love this one! Into the library it goes!

[Melody]

Thank you! :D I really appreciate that! :D

[deepblue04]

This is good! I like it! Keep up the good work!

[Melody]

Thank you. :)

[Fréyjä Helv..]

Every great artists begins with inspiration and passion... Every strong inspiration conjures brilliant masterpieces... It's a nice poem... A poem doesn't really have to have a rhyme, rhythm or meter. It's the thought that counts and flow should be smooth and consistent... Always remember that... I give you point for effort... Nice work...

[Melody]

Thank you. :)

[BorealPoet]

Once again feels jazzy. In this one I really enjoy the detail and the meter doesn't detract from my overal enjoyment of the poem which is awesome. It really does cater to an artist's taste though. In the first stanza I was playing a viola for example. Well done!

[Melody]

Thank you! :) I'm glad you enjoyed it and I'm also very happy that the meter doesn't really effect this poem in a negative way. Thank you so much Ethan. :)

[Admiral Kirk]

I'd like to comment on the meter, how well the poem flows without it. Some of the rhymes do seem forced, but overall, great job. If you need help rhyming, this works pretty well: http://rhymezone.com/ It helps me rhyme; even if I don't use the words it gives me, I always think of one on this site.

I like the topic of this poem. The ability to step out of a relationship that's not working, and forget about it, and be strong. Great job expressing yourself, and you really get the point across.

[Melody]

Thank you JS. :) I've actually used rhymezone a few times. I had had another friend suggest it, and I tried it and it helped a bit. It's a pretty helpful site. :) Thanks. XD

[Admiral Kirk]

Ha ha, you're welcome. I'm glad I could almost be helpful. :D

[Melody]

:)

[Timeless-Chan]

great great great poem! i think all of us on here can relate because we all have our own journeys to becoming the artists that we are:) love how you wrote about your own journey:) good luck from a fellow artist;)

[Melody]

Thank you Young Dreamer. (I love your username btw) :D

[Timeless-Chan]

ahaha your welcome:D and thanx:P

[xxxrawr_friendxxx]

*Applause* This is really great. Quite similar to how I became an artist. Lol, the ice cream line doesn't quite fit, but July is National Ice Cream Month. :3 July 18 is National Ice Cream Day. Anyway, nice job. It's nice to hear from a teen artist like myself lol. :D

[Melody]

Haha! I thought it sort of went with the scream line. But ....uhhh...meh. Lol. I'm glad you liked it and could relate to it! :D

[nigrum homonculus]

another good poem. i do like the message in this as i too have found solace in poetry. work with your rhymes though, you are getting there. crude and brute don't necessarily rhyme even though they sound the same. but other than that its good. i like it a lot.

[Melody]

Thanks DatVirgo! :) I appreciate it! shall work with the rhymes more, I WILL get them down one day. Lol

[nigrum homonculus]

i mean crude and brute sound similar. not the same. fail -___-

[Melody]

Lol, just a tad.