Over You (Edited)

:) I'm Strong. It's been edited. I need to figure out how to make versions....Lol

I like it when my heart breaks,
it may turn to little flakes.
I may seem shallow like a little lake,
but in all reality, I know the truth, I'm as deep as the Great Lakes.

I'm completely over you,
I saw right through your eyes, and I flew.
I avoided anymore pain, but I must say I was still a little blue.
You were the one who sent my thoughts askew.
I'm sorry to say this, but it's easier to get over you than to fall for you.

I fawned at you like an idol,
thinking someday I may be shopping at David's Bridal.
I bet you were thinking homicidal.
Yeah...Please. I'd like to see you get me thinking suicidal.

I looked at you like girls do to their puppy posters that sit on their wall,status idle.
I fell for you while you purposely put my heart on the wave tidal.

I'm over you, don't get your head full of thoughts.
You gave me a lot of knots,
I gave you a lot of shots
but it's like all you saw were little stars and dots.
It's like you had this as your story plot.

I get it I was used, laughed and bet upon,
but damn, I sure am I happy that I'm gone.
I was that boring white swan,
I gave you a big yawn.

If you ever need me again,
I'm not going to let you get in my head like I'm a playpen,

if you do, I'll put you in the bullpen.

Get it through that big thick skull,
I am not that dull.

You better believe it, I'm over you.

Author's Note

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Reviews

[Fréyjä Helv..]

The line "but damn, I sure am I happy that I am gone"
i think it's better if it was like "but damn, i sure am happy that I'm gone"
always remember to pay attention to the meter of the poem or its patterns of rhythm. That will make the poem flow smoothly. Though your rhymes are creative as well. Improve a bit on the pattern of syllables in each line. Oh and be careful with your choice of words. Again and brain don't really rhyme... Other than that. It's a nice poem...

[Melody]

Thank you very very much, I will keep your critiques in though. When I get on a computer again I will look over it again myself. :) Thank you Vittoria

[Fréyjä Helvití]

You're Very welcome... Glad I could help... :)

[Sam Gregory]

I think Maan said it all, I dont think ur lying to urself. Nicely written

[Melody]

Thank you very much Sam. :)

[Sam Gregory]

No problem :)

[Maan]

Umm I don't know this feeling of getting over something, I always have this concept that without getting something better than the previous one you just can't get over it, you know what I mean. If you haven't got anything better and you still say that you've got over the past then either you're lying to yourself, trying or pretending to be all right but in real the past always lingers inside until someone comes to heal and understand it. Any ways it is a nice poem, a little exaggerated. But still I like it. Nice flow of thoughts, very nicely expressed. Keep writing and keep sharing. :)

[Melody]

I'm pretty sure I'm not lying to myself. I'm always in check with my emotions. :) And if you felt what I'm feeling, it wouldn't be exaggerated but exhilarating. :)
Thank you, very much for telling me what you thought about it. I love hearing others thoughts. Thank you. :)