Cherished Keepsake

Short poem about a keepsake from days gone by.

The horse ran 'round in circles
North, South, East and West
He was pristine and shiny
Could gallop with the best.

He withstood the pressures
Hot days and the cold
Gazing over pastures
With a look so bold.

So sleek and majestic
Yet age began to mount
His twists and turns lessened
With each and every count.

He is now a rusted paint
Due to frequent rains
And a cherished keepsake
My Grandpa's weather vane.

 

Author's Note

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Reviews

[Coyote Poetry]

A good memory shared in the poetry.
"He is now a rusted paint
Due to frequent rains
And a cherished keepsake
My Grandpa's weather vane."
It is funny how the simple things we do remember. Thank you Melissa for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Blue]

Oh geez, I thought it's about a horse. Haha. But this is great. You have a knack for writing poems with story. Just the right dose of entertainment and wonder. Keep it up!

[MelissaAndres]

Thank you, Blue! I am glad you enjoyed it!

[wordman]

well you had me fooled,lol a weathervane,who knew

[MelissaAndres]

Haha, wordman! :)

[wordman]

it`s not nice to trick the wordman,lol!

[MelissaAndres]

Well, I kinda thought the picture I chose to go with the poem would give it away ... but I guess not! heehee....sorry 'bout that! ;)

[wordman]

just kidding,north,east,south and west gave it away !

[MelissaAndres]

Haha! Just messin' with ya!

[wordman]

not nice to mess with the wordman !

[annalysiar]

Its precious. And honest. Soothing. I like it

[MelissaAndres]

Thank you, annalysiar!

[alifeacoustic]

A lovely keepsake to have too Melissa, one that still holds many memories and will be forever cherished.
A lovely write of reminiscence and love.

[MelissaAndres]

Thank you, alifeacoustic! :)

[Jyoti_Ablaze]

A sweet but profound piece, Melissa!
You took the readers on the journey with the horse.
We all shine like stars sometimes and of course there comes clouds to bear but all is a part of life, right?
Great write!
Left me pondering.

[MelissaAndres]

Thank you for your kind comments, Jyoti!

[Jyoti_Ablaze]

You are welcome.