Dear God

This piece is a series of letters written to God. The writer pours out his heart to God. Enjoy

its your undeserving son
Yesterday i took a decision
daddy i knew the response
even before it was given
but it still took me by surprise
i knew its my fault
but i need her to understand
that i was investing thought and prayer
its too late is a lousy response
father it took me a while
but i know it was right on time
even though am acting up
am deeply affected by this
outwardly am full of smiles and
taking majestic steps
but deep within me am coiled up
and shedding tears
baba God,am so mad at myself
i dont know if i can stand
her sight
am here ,but i wish i could disappear
just so people around wouldnt
notice am being strong
but i dont know how long this
will last
i doubt if am strong enough
a part of me blames a fellow
daddy in you i surrender my
broken,shattered and torn spirit
please fix me
grant me grace for the race
i dont know if i should
call what i feel dissappointment
or "why was i stupid"
father ,personally i dont
believe in "too late"
if its not the rapture
its never too late
if something needs to be done about it
something will be done about it
dear God, with a broken heart
i retire to bed
even though sleep has left me

take not your spirit from me
your undeserving son

Author's Note

Please help me know my mistakes

Reviews

[angel]

What a beautiful prayer. I love that you call God "daddy" in several places. This is as it should be.
Jesus spoke Aramaic, the common language of those days in the area in which he lived. In Aramaic, the word "Abba" meant "Daddy". This term is found in three places; Romans 8:15, Mark 14:36, and Galatians 4:6.
In The verse in Mark was Jesus praying to His Father, asking that, if possible, he might not need to suffer being crucified. He was pouring His heart out to His daddy, and this intimate appellation was not used by Jesus in any other verse.The other two instances were the apostle Paul speaking to the churches in Rome and Galatia. He wanted them to understand the intimacy of a relationship wit God.
I always like to hear someone else call Him Daddy.
Now, you wanted to know about your mistakes. I will copy your poem here and correct the mistakes, and you can compare.
Dear God
A Poem by Melchezedek
" This piece is a series of letters written to God. The writer pours out his heart to God. Enjoy "
it's your undeserving son;
Yesterday i made a decision.
Daddy, i knew the response
Even before it was given,
But it still took me by surprise.
i know it's my fault,
But i need her to understand
That i was investing thought and prayer.
'It's too late' is a lousy response.
Father, it took me a while,
But i know it was right on time.
Even though I am acting up,
I am deeply affected by this.
Outwardly, I am full of smiles, and
Taking majestic steps;
But deep within me, I am coiled up
And shedding tears.
Baba God,am so mad at myself
i don't know if i can stand
The sight of her.
I am here ,but i wish i could disappear,
Just so the people around wouldn't
Notice. I am being strong,
But i don't know how long this
will last.
i doubt that I am strong enough.
A part of me blames a fellow.
Daddy, in You i surrender my
Broken,shattered and torn spirit.
Please, fix me!
Grant me grace for the race.
i don't know whether I should
Call what i feel disappointment,
Or "why was i stupid"
Father, personally i don't
Believe in "too late".
If its not the Rapture,
It's never too late.
If something needs to be done about it,
Something will be done about it.
Dear God, with a broken heart
i retire to bed
Even though sleep has left me.

Take not your spirit from me,
Your undeserving son.

I hope I have been able to help.

[Melchezedek]

U appreciate this review so much. Lets stay in touch

[angel]

You got it, man. I would be glad of it.