Disturbia

For what used to be Love For what seemed to be You.

Incomplete sentences

That is what you are

Mixture of vice,

Beauty and mystery

Wounded shapes

And erased circles

Papers on fire

Burning high

Breaking slow

Bottomless spaces

And tanned dots

Unconscious Yes

Unspoken refusals

Sustained in your scent

Some archaic stillness

The painting I never finished

The blemish I desire

These are all what you are

Always changing

Similar to the seasons

They yearn to fade

And the reasons

I seek in despair

The glance of your eyes

The blushes and the strives

Would I notice life?

When the breaths

Speak your name?

And the steps

Follow your shadow?

My nights are identical

The days run the same

Am I wrong to want you?

Or is it the sky to blame?

 

 

 

Reviews

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i tried to write you in a poem as my way of painting you...but it seems impossible to capture you well enough..and you leave me with and incomplete canvas of incomplete sentences...

i will never really be able to capture that which is in your eyes...and i know it is life, and it is my life.

nicely done.
jacob

[Mélania Woolf]

When words fail to describe ... you simply know this is true,what you are feeling ! And it haunts ...
Thank you for your kind words!

[Frieda P]

Wow this is brilliant, it's abstract and sublime at the same time...love it, last line is money!

[Mélania Woolf]

Wow thank you so much !

[Frieda P]

Pleasure was mine, I really love it...I'll be back !

[Mélania Woolf]

:D that's great !

[Lexi]

It's very powerful and conveys so much emotion, its really good :)

[Mélania Woolf]

Thank you so much Lexi ! :D

[Wiif]

I love this so much, and somehow I can relate to it, as it is reading my mind. Good job choosing the words, the images you draw are very powerful and vivid, continue writing awesomeness :)

[Mélania Woolf]

thank you for reading and commenting ! *: Glad you liked it.