Look Down From A Hilltop

I used to view the scene from this cliff almost everyday but the thought of writing a poem on it came to me when one day after rain I saw this magnificent serene sight till as far as the eye can see.

When I look down from my school

which lies on top of a hill,

I get filled with peace and charm

as all seems very still.

The corridor behind our class 

is the best place to be,

For it is from here one can view the vast

Terai* plains to as far as one can see.

I like to gaze at the gentle slopes or

the brooks in the valley.

And the stream that escapes the lake

by making a forceful sally.

Far away in the horizon I can see

a mighty river,

And to the other side I see-

hills that go on forever.

The gentle hills are in a zig-zag form-

one partly behind the other,

They are all covered with mighty trees,

ferns and heather.

Sometimes I see little clouds drifting away,

filled up with fun.

And I see black birds flying swiftly

as if straight to the sun!

So if you get a chance to come to our school-

you must be sure you peep,

At this magnificent marvelous sight and

with joy you may weep!

(*terai- foothills.)

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Author's Note

I wrote this rather quickly so please don't mind small errors. Thank you.

Reviews

[Lively]

It always fascinates when one see out of the window in school. But when it is on a hill top, the scenery is heaven!

[Eric Cox]

Wow! Beautiful scenes. Cool pen upon this poem of beauty done with a cool lightheartedness!

[Skye]

Its great to be written so fast, i love it! i get a wonderful picture in my mind.

[Deadly Nightshade]

I agree with the other reviews out here. The poem is really written in a very nice style. One review states that Stanza 5 is a bit choppy. I agree with it. You may change it a bit. Rest of the poem is beautiful.

[Violeta]

Quite well-written for your speed. Some of the rhyming words you place seem a little forced, so maybe flow could be a bit better in stanzas 5 and 7. Also, the way you spelled marvellous is actually marvelous. Other than that, I really liked the imagery you gave, keep up the good work!

[msharma]

Brilliantly sketched the panoramic view of the foothill scene.Always outstanding!Keep the spirit going.

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Oh this is so wonderful, I really liked this write,
ever so lovely and dreamy.

[Crystal Marie Rome]

So beautiful. I have tears in my eyes and I can just imagine the scene your describing. Beautiful work and do your best! =)