The Lake Upon The Mountains

I like to observe nature and natural beauty. Moreover I have been to some good scenic places. Therefore, it often finds place as a topic of my amateur poems... Well I live on a lake city.. D;

The Lake Upon The Mountains was as emerald

as it can be,

With shades of ocean blue and ocean green

as far as one can see.

'Twas surrounded with hill tops enshrouded with

floating silver fog,

With little marshes here or there and

here or there a bog.

A mischievous river took the excess water 

swiftly down the hill,

But even then the mighty lake had 

more water still!

For nineteen brooks and two small streams

always ran down to it,

Adding to whatever it had in plenty though

just bit by bit.

Along the lake and over the hill were forests

lush green and fine,

With sturdy Sal thick Cedar and The

Old Tree Pine.

I once went there with my friends and you

 already know what I saw,

Everything was green and fine as if that 

was the only law!

There are hills and fog, marshes and bogs,rivers,

waterfalls and fountains,

But the only thing to be seen first will surely be

The Lake Upon The Mountains.

Author's Note

Please if you like this poem can you please tell which two lines are the best...THANKS!!

Reviews

[Akshat♥]

i really like these lines:
"Along the lake and over the hill were forests
lush green and fine,
With sturdy Sal thick Cedar and The
Old Tree Pine."
you really write well..i can see that:)
i also love nature..its beauty..
moving to different places with friends..
you are almost there..you just need time to improve..
keep writing:)

[Gil Keidar]

Nice Poem! I really like the ending. It reads:

"There are Hills and Fog, Marshes anf bogs, rivers,
waterfalls and fountains,
But the only thing to be seen first will surely be
The Lake Upon The Mountains."

Really nice ending! Please note that I'm 10 years old so some of my writings still need to be upgraded to the next level. Cool poem though!

[Violeta]

"There are hills and fog, marshes and bogs,rivers,
waterfalls and fountains,
But the only thing to be seen first will surely be
The Lake Upon The Mountains."

The end of the poem is my absolute favorite, it seems you've got the "show and tell" method down pat! I could visualize the entire way through, good job :)

[nishalization]

Though I can't say it was a junior worthwords' work as i'm no one but I would love to say that this was faithful enough to drain the idea of your poem... It was so clear and I like it.. Keep it up!

[Crystal Marie Rome]

Really awesome poem and so well described I could clearly imagine it. Good job and do your best! =)

[msharma]

Dear writer loved the real essence you sprinkled through your words....the lines drag attention are"The more water still.he mischievous river..... "

[Mehul Rwat]

This is my first poem. Please tell what you feel about it - good or bad does not matter. I shall do better in my next poems. I am a new amateur writer - maybe unskillful and clumsy as compared to others. But writing poems make me happy and give me 'internal' peace. I'm prepared for any form of constructive critique that comes my way.