Fake

just about confused teenage love, tell me what you think.

love kills me,

 breaks me down slowly.

 nobody knows whats hiding behind my blue eyes. when i cry it helps, takes off my stress, I thought I loved you, as you tore off my dress.

 I let you invade me, inside and out, your love destroyed me and made me shout. but this smile is fading as your love turns to hate,

 I thought I had you, not fate.

it brought us together then tore us apart, I live to hear the beat of your heart. but I can't hear it when we are too far apart, please come closer,

 listen to my cry, I know what your thinking as you roll your eyes.

 but this love turned to hate, nothing to accept, nothing that great. your unnatural, is your job to kill me?

 its working, im fading away slowly,

 bring back to me, what I gave to you, not in a package, you brough it in two, one piece said I and one piece said you,

 I want to blend them together and make us one, but honey you have to love me back, to make this life fun.

Author's Note

tell me what you think, be honest.

Reviews

[SH]

I think it would really help if you broke this up into stanzas. It would be easier on the eyes and would help your poem flow better. There are also some spelling errors (yo - you, vry - cry, un-natural - unnatural, brough -brought, etc)
I can see that this is your first piece of writing, and it's a good start, but you can certainly grow and do much better works after some guidance and practice :)

[Hippy]

work on your spelling do not spell on the internet you dont got spell check its all an eye sore in uninviting to read cut it into diffrent lines