On the Lake

ancient towns with all new people

destruction, at its best

my regard for the human race

has never been less

the ignorance, selfishness,

arrogance, stupidity

this change in society

something I never thought I'd see

these people don't deserve the sun

and definitly not the rain

they only see the surface beauty

not the underlying pain

the rocks, the dirt

the foundation of this earth

where has the earth gone

where has the foundation gone

where have the genuine 

beautiful people gone

the sun is out, but all is gray

my mind is snowing on a seventy degree day

Reviews

[Aeternal Oceanfire]

This is a great poem with a brilliant message! Magnificent! As one poet (whose name has slipped my mind) once said, "I love not man the less, but nature more". I heartily disagree. I like man less. True, very true. Ignorant, selfish, arrogant, stupid, selfish, but there is some underlying potential. Unfortunately, ignorance cancels out that. So sad. Thomas Hobbes's ideas were spot on!

One quick suggestion, which you can ignore if you wish. I would change "seventy degree" to "sultry". I believe it sounds more poetic and gives the line better flow. But, it's just an opinion.

Wonderful Job!!!

[Ramya]

Wow, this is great writing. You have brought out the traits of humankind very well. Totally enjoyed every word here....excellent job!!:)