Goodbye

Hugs have been given

Whispers have been heard

Mistakes have been forgiven

Lines have been blurred

Tears have been shed

Lips have been kissed

Though, today l still dread

Because you will be missed. 

I know, it is true

that our time was small

but one night with you

exceeds none at all

I’ll wipe my tears

and I will move on

I’ll begin these long years

with you being gone. 

Reviews

[emipoemi]

Another sad and soulful piece. Stanza 3, if you don't mind my saying, is awkward on two levels: 1- "none" is misspelled, and 2- time being "small" is a mixed metaphor. Time is "short", but something else could be "small". Other than that, this is brilliant! Well done!

[Nix]

A sad and emotionally charged poem. Well written in its entirety. I would recommend editing the second stanza just slightly, the rhythm is a tad awkward. Other than that the rhyming scheme is flawless. Well done.

[MeganRuth]

thanks! Yes, I realized that about the second stanza and I've been considering ways to fix it. Thanks for the feedback and I'm glad you enjoyed it! :)