jerusalem

terror class
fighter jet
drums over dunes
loom closer at night
with its teeth
over mines
over my sister who rests deep
poor creature
dismissal is ambivalent
as with minimals
of equivocal spectacles
those with a flash
and a bang
that take roofs and then lives
under lies of pretentious rescue
is it you, and your misuse

or is it a deeper fright?

Reviews

[jacob erin-cilberto]

this is really sad...the unfortunate loss of innocent lives because of wars...terror attacks etc.
violence wreaks havoc often on those who have no real hand in promoting it.
love the "equivocal spectacles"
in fifth line it should be "its"...
but a really deep and moving write, showing that even those attempting to do good, will often cause more tragedy...
j.

[winter;lyra]

That "it's" haunts me, I've noticed it like a hundred times and always forget to change it
read moreThat "it's" haunts me, I've noticed it like a hundred times and always forget to change it

Thank you for your review, it's not often that I get a constructive one with real insight